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Death Tips It's Hat

I feel it
Death is falling
Like a fallow fog
After eons of neglect
Decades of denial
Limitless self flagellation
And other-blaming
Death tips its' hat
Laughing at the thought of your twisted self neglect
Eagerly waiting to take you in

Are you ready for
The Reaper

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  • Ez Writer silver member
    April 23

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    Grrreat !

    Great read Andrew !! Thought provoking
    for sure .There's no self neglect here , so
    I'm not ready for the
    grim reaper , as of yet //
    Best regards ! Friend Easy


  • lyricist
    March 26

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    interesting poem. laughing at the thought of your twisted self neglect eagerly waiting to take you in. very good piece.


  • couldbeworse
    March 24
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    makes me stop and think....what will i say when my time is up? well done. keep penning.


  • Bev Hilderman gold member
    March 19

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    Well done poet.
    Well it made me think of smoking.

     I have not had one in about two weeks.

    I really wonted one tonight but I did not have one. And I am glad, after reading your poem

    and thinking of self neglect

    that's were all us smokers are stuck, in self neglect. .

     

    Thanks for sharing


  • yesikita
    March 18
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    this forces self reflection...very good!


  • SanitZdFreedom
    March 12
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    Wow! Captured NICE!~Beautiful


  • hisaddiction
    March 11
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    hell yeah lol i love it! love it! love it!

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