A biotechnologist by profession
Poetry is the window to my soul
When the world didn't seem to listen
My words beatified me making me whole
I have a small lovely family
My mom being my lifeline
They are the beautiful side of me
They have been a real ray of sunshine
My love is an unheard blessing
Given to me by the Almighty
A love beautiful and inspiring
That will stay on till eternity
Ambitions give me a reason to live
They mean the world to me
Dedicated research is my motive
The fulfillment of my dreams,the world will see
But let me tell you beyond my arrogance
Lies a beautiful and loving heart
Blessed with hopeful patience
And optimism that doesn't depart
My life has been filled with pain
Miraculously I was pulled out of it
With no regrets and nothing to complain
Into Lord Jesus hands I completely submit
12th "March" 2009
© 2006-2009 Rinzu Susan Rajan
Author notes
for the contest 10 options prewrites aloud
option something about you
A contest entry
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Very touching.
I like this poem in many ways, not the least of which is that I share your faith, which makes you my brother. What I like about this is the story that it tells. What I think you need to work on is the meter, because as it is now it doesn't flow well. The rhyme scheme is fine; it's just the meter that weakens it. There is one more thing I I would suggest you consider. Window to my soul is a cliché. I would like to see you find a more original way to say the same thing. I wouldn't make these suggestions if I didn't think the poem was worth the effort; I do.
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That's great! I really liked the rhyme! I liked the flow! I really think you have a real talent! I enjoyed this piece!
Wish you the best of luck!
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It's beautiful. Thank you and good luck.
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Wow, the honesty and purity of the piece is overwhelming. I like the last stanza. This is very well done. Good job and good luck! ~Des
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THANKS A TON...
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fantastic! is there any point in any of us entering this contest, you gotta win with this!
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amazing write, yes, most def.
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Bravo!
Sounds like an amazing journey that you are on with wonderful blessings & certainly the right attitude. May you be richly blessed in all you do & may His loving hands guide you & protect you in all you do.
So glad I read this!
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Hello, Yes, life sure has its hurts, ups and downs. I am thankful EVERY day for my pen. Yes, I will enter your contest. It isn't the best (I do not claim to be a poet) but what I enter, is truly me.
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So was I. . .
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Beautiful write! Was just checking it out prior to entering the contest you posted.
Thanks!
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I really liked this. Your ambition is definatle an amazing one and i wish you the very very very best of luck with that!!
The poem was really great. I really loved the flow that you created and i only have one tiny comment about the first stanza
'On my words I depended upon' doesn't really make much sense? I think that instead of using on, you should use another word..? Just a suggestion. Very lovely and emotional write. Thank you for telling me about yourself. Thank you for your entry. xo -
I definitely wish you luck on your cancer research. Perhaps you will be the one to help cancer's victims the most of all. You are a wonderful person (based on what you've written here). I am sure you will do wonders for the world. Thanks so much for entering my contest.
Lauren
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a family full of love is the blessing of human life....you have it and all the good qualities of a human being like compassion...may God bless you....the rhyme is appreciable too..
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