there's a mist around the moon tonight
and my heart
i can feel it sliver through me
just shards of broken glass
that damned whiskey bottle
half empty
feel it cold and wet
like the empty can of beer
you tossed across the room
can you feel me
you blew through me
just a birthday wish
that little girl blowing
through anxious lips
holding on to what it means
to love you
make it mean something
tell me i'm not crazy
or drunk
tell me you are here
and feel it too
because i can feel you
in the mist
Author notes
Shatter My Soul, Let My Heart Ache
A contest entry
- Shatter My Soul, Let My Heart Ache by Reaper-117.
1500 points, ended May 27, 106 entries
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This feels like a solid read and puts an image in my head. The unknown elements are hinted at and leace the reader to ponder over what is there and what isn't, much like our narrator's drunken mind must be functioning. I got the impression of confusion and desire and anger...a nice write.
Thanks for entering. -
I actually like this a lot.
It fits the prompt well, I think.
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