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false calm


placid lake surface
reflects gathering storm clouds
calm belies turmoil

A contest entry

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  • toomysterious
    July 31

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    Somehow I missed this one. You do haiku so well. This one is so multilayered with symbolism and metaphor, a perfect description of how appearances can be deceptive. Each word you have chosen fits perfectly to form a vision of underlying unrest. I must say this is excellent.


  • Swan song gold member
    March 27
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    Niely done you could sense the mountain of tension in a sense in your poem


  • Frogzter gold member
    March 16
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    such a vivid picture rendered in this Haiku... wonderful imagery~ Best wishes

    Frogz


  • Blankscreen2222
    March 12

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    I like how you describe the snapshot view and then make the comparison between the 2 opposing forces. Conjours up some great imagery.

    Good luck with it in the contest.


  • albymyheart gold member
    March 11

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    Lovely imagery here, I can just see the lake's reflections of a turbulant sky and the calm before the storm. A lovely Haiku with nice concise wording. Good luck in the contest...alby


  • itsman
    March 11
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    nice write how true that sometimes "calm belies turmoil" good luck

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