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My Infernal Earth

With every glistening string
Tiptoes through a forest of pulsing warmth
Thoughts
Jumping exciting
To feel the heat so unusual
Silk touching from you
Your sight melts to mine
Infernal earth
Scorching in the eye
Luscious browns and grounds
As a ribbon of arms cascades
Onto this melting touch of yours
When the fires burn on
Reaching new rivers
Heat fading
Representation of sun setting
Thoughts jumping
Erratically
Sporadically'
To your ever glazing embers
In all your tight hold

I just want infernal earth
To burn me to life
Infinite

My love.

Author notes

Is this confusing? It was written on a whim, an attempt to represent the cliched topic of love in my own expierience

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  • Frikyeah
    March 18

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    I loved it, and I actually liked that it was a little confusing. to me that puts more of your own person effect in it and portrays themeaning of it. but thats just my oppinion.
    I loved it! so great write!
    -Emm


  • tombruize
    March 11
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    Nice write

    Great imagery...


  • Summer Dawn
    March 11

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    lovely poem, would probably remove the words: 'i just' from it and reword it a little, just an opinion. over all good write.


  • FaerieNWonderland
    March 10

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    this is great....
    the ending is a lil confusing but it really has a lot of passion and a great view on love