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The truth

Truth!

The ancient Demon

Upon the forbiten tree

She spoke in riddles

Shook the fruit down

In abandance

For all to witness

The miracle of love

Freely sacrificing herself

Till all thirst were quenched

Into the pools of light

Flame swords span around her

Devouring the tong

Of the Noon walker

That sprang among the mead

Of death

For t`is food of beasts

Having choice not

But bow in ignorance

Filling bellies

Till lies swallen, and hunger

For more.

 

 

 

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  • Perfect Asymmetry
    April 3
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    Wow, this is an interesting theme! I loved the imagery.
    Well done!
    Nela


  • BonnieQ silver member
    March 24
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    Yoohoo! Bronze Winner!

    Congratulations, dearest brother, on this fantastic poem being honored with the bronze! Very deserving of even more.

    Luv & hugs, SisBon


  • spirit rising
    March 13

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    this is a very powerfull read with such truth spoken, your usage of words bring great imagery and power to this peice.
    good luck with the contest.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    March 13

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    I agree with you dear friend..you have shared the universal truth..and the depth of the life which we all are living as well..well done..


  • Sandygram
    March 11

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    An amazing poem about how lies can destroy so many things people we hold dear. Excellent imagery. A pleasure to read. Take care, Sandy

  • BonnieQ silver member
    March 11

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    Pay Homage to Lies by Calling them Truth

    Oh, how the world pays honor to lies, devouring all they can and wanting more. Indeed, upon lies they gorge until . . . their gluttony will be their demise. Awesome poem, darling brother! I like the language you've used, almost but not quite archaic: it lends a great deal of power to this poem. This is surely a winner!

    Luv & hugs, SisBon


  • campanaro silver member
    March 10

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    Simply brilliant

    Once in a great while, if one is lucky.. Will discover
    superb writing that touches the spirit,
    This was one of those moments.
    Thank you my friend for this.
    The very best to you in this contest.
    Best
    Love Peace
    campanaro

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