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~ Sexual Dance ~

I give you my soul, which I cherish so much,
Now give me your sweet and gentle touch.
Fill me with desire; soothe my aching need,
Give me your body, for my heart will bleed.

I need to feel your body, pressing up against mine,
I hunger to feel our limbs, intertwine.
Kiss my soft neck; nibble my tender ears,
Whisper words of love, rid me of all my fears.

Now slowly caress my breast; gently touch my nipple,
Grab and pull it, for my body will then cripple.
Kiss your way down my body, caress my every inch,
When you reach my mound of love, I can’t help it but flinch.

Touch it, kiss it, put your finger deep inside,
Feel my dew of desire; take me now with pride.
Take it slow at first, then thrust deep down inside,
Show me that you want me, and make love to me in stride.

Look at me; stare into my eyes,
Let me know what you are feeling, tell me no lies.
Grab my behind now; squeeze it at first,
Then spank me hard, make my body thirst.

I am getting close now, my body is tensing,
I am in a state of pleasure; I am hanging by a string.
You are almost there, our moans and groans coincide,
it is just a short time now, before the feeling subsides.

Pleasure overcomes my body; I am lost in lust,
I feel you explode inside me, with one last thrust.
We both come down now, tired by love and desire,
I collapse onto you, where my body will now retire.



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I've never experienced an orgasm but here is an erotic poem...new to writing these so go easy on me please!!

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  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    October 28

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    Very sexy and sultry this is...wow!
    Tastefully written, too!
    You did a fine job with this piece and it does leave a "tingle" with your reader
    All the best to you!


  • Darc Raven
    August 8

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    nicely done, my dear fox... your words speak of one who is expirianced (though you have already said you never expirianced an orgasm as of this poem)

    I like how you refered to the female's wetness as "dew of desire"... never thought to call it something of that nature. very original...

    great work love

    ~Your Darc


  • Knight70 silver member
    May 3

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    No constructive criticism here.

    Hey, you said that rhyme was tough! It's brilliant here. This one has its own sweet rhythm trickling from one line to the next. It puts the reader in the moment with a true sense of what eroticsm sounds like when it's written well. Delaney writes some fantastic erotica on AP. This is one of my favorite pieces of erotic poetry that I have read in my two years on AP. The enticing images keep me reading. I think you could be writing novels in this genre, and do very well.


  • Beret55 silver member
    April 28
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    I love this one too. mmmmmmmm

  • new? Wow...no sexual experience...double wow...you described it very well for not having any experience (in the poetry form OR the sex) ...great job

  • mcfreeman
    March 28
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    nice imagination....


  • Emmyb gold member
    March 18

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    a very erotic and sensual journey you have taken me on. congratulations on this fantastically written, engaging piece.

    Thanks for entering this contest

    Emmyb


  • perfectsunset gold member
    March 12

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    This was a very beautifully crafted
    sensual write. Full of vivid, hot imagery
    and very detailed.

    Thanks for sharing & best of luck

  • Mmmm, this makes delicious reading. Well paced and very sensual. Thanks for the pleasure. Well done.


  • Heroesrox
    March 11
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    Awesome job, hon! This was sensual and good! Thanks for sharing!

  • Well for not having experienced one and being new to erotic, you are doing amazing. Excellent piece, hun.

  • Using the word mound put me off immediately.
    I can't read this.

    What happened to suggestion??

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