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Two Denver's on Rye

I wake up 6 AM each day,
Looking forward to a meaningless pay.
moving through the lies of a broken humanity
lost in a form of my own insanity.

I put on the uniform
Watching them all swarm
The bills fly in
Leaving no time to spin

Two Denver's on Rye
One with Ceasar one with Fries.

I cant stand it
like a crime i didn't commit
I want more
This cant be what i live for.

And yet..
as i break that hard earned sweat
another order comes flying in
leaving no time to spin

Two Denver's on Rye,
One with Ceasar one with Fries.

 

I'm home at 9 PM

Crawling in bed feeling a sudden condemned

lying awake till the sun raises

hoping it will bring new suprises.

 

Two Denver's on Rye

One with Ceasar one with Fries.

 

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  • kool

    kool poem =), you have a unique style of writing , wonderful poetry , k
    kool
    byyyyyyyyyye

  • nice, fries nice write, i liked the 1st stanza the most. it flowed nicely and made a lot of sense


  • Creed Trees
    March 22
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    Aww this poem was lovley. I'm sorry this is your life. It kinda sucks but I could tell from the poem exactly where it was going. The ending of the poem was perfect. Good write Teddy! You're always great at your writes. Your ideas to write poems seem to come out of thin air to me. They're really good.


  • XxVampyressxX
    March 11

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    i truly loved it squishy, you just need to make fun to your life every now and than. Spice up your life and just enjoy it while u can. I feel the same way about my life as u do yours


  • LonleyVixen
    March 11

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    wow Jordan, if this really is about ur everyday life, i feel for you. i wish u cud be happy. u deserve it, y not change up that dreary old life?


  • RavenWings
    March 11
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    its good:)

    why are you unhappy with the life you picked ?

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