I cannot lose the feeling of your fingers on my own
Or your head against my shoulder and my cheek
Each evening as we're chatting, far apart but on the phone
I want to kiss your lips but have to speak
It won't be long my dearest until Friday comes again
And once again our hands will intertwine
But every day without you is a quite inhuman strain
I want to feel your body next to mine
I wonder if you feel me in your dreams each night in bed
For in my dreams I know that you are there
I feel that you are with me 'though you're just inside my head
Why can't there be more time for us to share
One day we'll be together and we won't be be forced to part
And dreams will be just part of how we live
Until that time you're with me in the beating of my heart
It's pumping all the love that you can give
A contest entry
- ** Show me the LOVE! ** by Selithia.
682 points, ended March 11, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me honestly what you think, good or bad.
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It takes a lot of macho to be so mushy! What a lovely tender poem. I think of how one of my brothers must feel, who travels for work too frequently. His wife is so dear and so lovely.
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Lovely Jeff, this is very sweet and tender. You express yourself so well in love poems. The heart of the man that just wishes to share. *sigh*
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I could say more but Excellent says it all so thats it
Excellent
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Beautiful Beautiful work! This poem is amazing! But as badly as i would like to place you,I absolutely cant because You did not put in your Author notes what your favorite colour is. It would not be fair for me to place you and not the others who actually read the rules. Im really sorry! I think you would have got second place,too...
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Damn!
I meant to write there "I don't think I have a favourite colour"
but forgot
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You never flag, you never fall below your own standard, you always do exactly what it says on the tin. There has to be a way of channelling what you do into a single, marketable project - I remain convinced.
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great flow and ryme as always from what I have seen.
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This is such a sweet write. Reading love poems written by men is a treat for me for it shows me more about the elusive world of mens thoughts. I look forward to reading more of your writing.
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Thank-you I'm not sure how much reading you will help you see into men's heads, I am a bit mushier than the norm
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Ain't THAT the truth, bro!
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lol... I can tell that you would be a man to spoil the heck out of a woman that you chose to care about. Your poetry alone shows the loving soul that you carry within. Keep writing and I will keep reading.
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