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Derailed

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Your push pretends,
demands
          my pull
your twist,
the tether of 
          my turn,
desire fires eyes to spurn;
          our space must be kept clear.

Hands grasp my waist
caress to knee
rebellion steps up

  one
two
  three ...

to catch our breath with spin and swirl
cheek flushed to cheek

ripe pink,

          spit curl.

Our dip, abrupt,

with plunge pressed back,
intrusive thrusts
heave tight round breasts -

we part with gasps
in single breaths.

My panting pull
          your quivered push
my lucid turn
          your pressed arm twist

defy the urge to play this tryst.

Exhort with single fingertip
just slightly lower than the hip.

When digits lean,
caress the palm

excitement sparks -

          electric,

calm.

Eyes know the score,

resistance failed
all pretenses
have been derailed.





Author notes

PROMPT: Looking for the sensual drama of a tango, the erotic tension of this
dancing duel...

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  • Ithica silver member
    March 14

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    This felt as if I were right there on the edge of the dance floor watching every nuance with the dancer's same breathless anticipation... Love the attention to both motion and those tiny physical details that brought this tango to life before my eyes... Thank-you for another lovely entry...


    • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
      March 16
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      Thank you for such a delightful review, a wonderful comment, and the honor of bronze in your contest. A great prompt. ~Pamela


  • Blue Rew silver member
    March 13

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    A pulse-pounder extraordinaire....
    The dance unfolds here, reader's heart picks-up
    the innuendos and flutters like a flame red skirt
    set in twirl. I especially liked your placing with:
    'rip pink spit curl"
    Sensational how you ply motion to page.
    Blue


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  • meena krish
    March 13

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    That was exciting as well as very, very sensual!
    I did not know a dance can bring about such passion. Another enjoyable read..best of luck!


    • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
      March 16
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      Always a pleasure to receive your comments dear poet. Thank you so much. ~Pamela


  • Peteskid gold member
    March 11

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    Yes, the quick moves pressing form to form, Tango a dance of passion...captured so well here...beautiful...PK


  • Nickelspring gold member
    March 11

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    What a lovely dance, sensual and descriptive. The occasional rhyme adds spice.
    I love the form.
    KW~


  • Fug-azi
    March 11
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    to good to comment further

    • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
      March 16
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      Colin, I thank you kindly for such a lovely comment. Good to see your smiling face here too. Than you. ~Pamela


      • Fug-azi
        March 16

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        I put that up to frighten small children and animals from my author page


  • Idle Mind Wondering silver member
    March 11

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    A perfect dance is always about well placed responses;
    and this is a perfect dance

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