The opaque light that wanders into my room,
reflects the empty wall silently staring back at me,
my mind quiescent.
And i am alone for the first time
in my life.
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Born alone and die alone. Loniliness is something that no one can comfort and nothing can change.
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great job
wow i am getting in love with ur poetry.cool poem. -
Short, simple biut beautifully eloquent!! I especially love: "The opaque light that wanders into my room,
reflects the empty wall silently staring back at me" Beautiful job!
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Tasty
uber wow, i realy like how you make the type of light into a solid sorrow, turning everything blank.
great read
Pappa Smurf
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Ah..well this is the truth aof life and one can relate with the happenings of life making us alone time and again..well said..
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sounds like one of my silent breakdowns. awesome write.
kAsSiE
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With few words you said so much...and it reached into my heart because I could relate. Good write!
Pam
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Its funny because I used to hate to be alone. I still do from time to time but i've learned to embrace the silence and peace it offers. It seems i've learned the most revealing and honest things about myself in those moments. Again, you say so much with so little. Amazing job darling.
xoxo-Jaymie. <33
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This is a great poem. The background is kind of distracting and sort of is the opposite of what the poem is about...quiescent, what a fabulous word. I'll have to use that in a future conversation! :-) thank you for entertaining me.
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ooh i can FEEL the lonelyness! and i learned a new word "quicent" interesting word choice! i like this peice, thank you for the opportunity. cancerous minds.... i understand this title now. great write, maybeill venture further.
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Reality--what a sharp, cold blade cutting us off severing all ties to that one person who has become our.......
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this poem just really speaks volumes. i really liked that in such a few words your spoke such a honest truthfulness. great work.
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It is very open and honest assesment of the self..and it happens mostly when you are sad..very true my friend..well done..thanks...
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Awesome title for such a powerful piece. Keep up the great work! Thanks for sharing!
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WOW!!! Such a powerful meaning in such little words. I really loved the ending, because the reader could either take it as being alone is like you saying you're finally at peace, or that there is this silent sadness swirling around your head.
I liked this a lot!!
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This is short but well-written and powerful. There's nothing wrong with saying as much as you can in as little words as possible! It's quite a reflective piece as well; I think that's what I like best about it.
Thanks for sharing this poem with us, and keep writing!
~Sparrow
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This is an awesome little poem. I love it. Your a very talented writer kels Keep up the amazing work
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dam, this is amazing.
i love it,
it is so captivating.
even though it is rather short,
it has more emotion then
almost anything ive ever read.
great job,
<3banna.
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I love this poem. It's so gripping and very well written. The title caught my eye - cancerous minds. Reminds me of the times I spend at night,
thinking too deep and falling to my own chaotic, cancerous mind.
Sometimes I think myself into a misserable state.
The power of the mind is amazing.
And your poem portrayed this for me.
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wonderful imagery.. very well written. short but to the point!
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Holy Pnacakes!
this piece is short...but so very powerful!
I love it really...the imagery wis so wonderfully done and it leaves an impact on the reader. one of your best poems for sure.
I do not understand though....what insipred this piece...why did you want so baddly for me to read it. Have I left you feeling..alone?
well done,
-Dustin-
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Very beautiful piece. It takes me back to Robert Frost or Walt Whitman. Just that simple classical poetry that I love. I love the way you packed so much into 5 lines, one verse. Amazing piece. - cgirl0410
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holy shit
this is the best poem you've ever written.
I demand more like these. You are incredibly good at free verse... not that typical 4 lined rhymed stanzas. This is beautiful. I love you! It's almost as beautiful as you are!
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Although very short, it had a lot of impact. NAd it sucks being alone, ecspecially when it's the first time.
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beautiful, yet sad.
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Very short, but still awesome. I like it.
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