lying in her B/E/D of BLACK and w.h.i.t.e dreamssss
were S*T*A*R*S watch o/v/e/r/ her
with no r.e.a.s.o.n.s. to [[Live]]
but her d.r.e.a.m.s. keep her [Sain]
hes BrOkE this "girl" in t/w/o...
She [served] him like a W*H*O*R*E
and got n o t h i n g [back]
dreams NeVeR come T.r.u.e...
shes an [[ANGEL]] with a D*I*R*T*Y face
[AcId] tears and f.a.k.e smilessss
shes that [[DIRTY PRETTY KID]]
with a p.a.i.n.t.e.d [smile] on her face...
S M I L E
L A U G H
L I V E
F*A*K*E
what SHE does is a.l.l. [[FAKE!!]]
shes to b/r/o/k/e/n to care
thanks to HIM!!
being his W*H*O*R*E was NEVER anough
now shes just a c.a.n.d.y tasting s/i/n/g/l/e [[FAKE]] P*R*I*N*C*E*S*S
But fairytales n/e/v/e/r come true for H*E*R
shes [[OVER]] it...
Author notes
for a contest, tell me what you think though 
thanks xxx
A contest entry
- D.I.R.T.Y. [p r e t t y] ♥ ConTest ♣ by Kathraina.
490 points, ended March 20, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think?
Comments
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Wonderful job with this piece.
The construction is great for Dirty Pretty, so I wouldn't change that. The only criticism is just a couple of spelling errors. Otherwise --> Great job! -
i agree with the previous comment but i like the poem dispite the way you've written it. maybe add the poem again in a more simple form
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wow this was os hard to read dosent it take like tow times longer towrite like that ...... can you even read it, i dont even knoe what to say about your poem because of the way you wrote it
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