Wondering what I did to deserve such a life
Always alone in my heart, people I love snatched away
Never knowing what will happen next or where ill go
So I stand by wishing id wake up from this dream
Everyone walks past me looking at me like I'm an outcast
In truth I’m no one, the person I used to be washed away
The tears that I’ve shed are all around me
I continue to breathe everyday despising my own life
The path that I’m heading down is buried somewhere so I make my own
I look back with no regrets, many sacrifices I’ve made just to survive with my sanity
I proceed to push forward feeling pain with each step
I will strive to make it on my own; independent I have no other option
It’s so confusing at times my head pounds and my heart throbs but not a tear falls
I will not allow them the satisfaction of success in my misery
I wear my mask daily projecting a false personality
The walls I've assembled allow no one inside
My mind is indescribable; I alone can’t comprehend my own thought
Yet until I walk free this is who I am
Honest opinion?
Comments
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interesting, a little to emo kid for me but there is a good piece of work here potential wise...describe more alliteration more imagery, make me sad for this piece's character not pity
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You write it on paper it helps. Good job of doing that. I have walked in them shoes, so hold your head up,and remember you are not alone.
Joe
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Heartwrenchingly beautiful
Why wait to walk free? You shouldnt hide yourself behind walls and masks...after all you just build those walls to see who will climb over them or knock them down...and sometimes that person has to be yourself. I understand this poem because i used to be this person. And yes it is painful just keep going...after a life of being pushed into the corner stepped on and forgotten...you have to get up. Dont drown in your tears...swim....and get out of them. I thought this poem was genious...It really made me think...No empty comment here! =)
Keep up the good work.
-Megan
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