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etiquette.



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and now, it's crazy how
a phone line can stay dead for
days, years-

words don't seem that important-
just things to fill the gaps.



sometimes
you want to haul your hand into
the holes

and feel
nothing but that waiting-room
hospital silence.




you want
the world to stop with you;
take the same breath

and draw
simple stuff like rainbows
and keep 'the weather is great's

for another sunny day


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i cant write.

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  • broken-colours
    March 10, 2009

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    "you want
    the world to stop with you;
    take the same breath"
    wow. had to pause on that one. definitely felt that way before.

    I agree with Tegan; you CAN write, silly. :]


    • checkmate
      March 10, 2009
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      thank you for all your awesome comments...you definitely cheeed me up :D something's wrong with my messages, i can't send any..hope you'd be able to read this!! once again, thanks tons for all your wonderfanatastic comments. i love 'em like crazeee :D

      th


  • obatala
    March 10, 2009

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    I disagree, you can write. This proves it.
    The beginning of this was stellar and immediately had me sucked in, I know this feeling so well, it kind of hurt while I was reading it.
    You're fantastic.

    ♣ Tegan

    • checkmate
      March 10, 2009
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      aww thanks tons for your comment!! so glad i met you- and see, if i am fantastic, you are untouchable when it comes to poetry. hahas. thanks again!! :) -checky.

      c