i tie the red-and-white thread
(of what happened)
into a knot
and March barely means you
to me, anymore;
it’s not the sun that spins faster
than we can keep up,
it’s that our feet keep damp,
sweaty from the past
and forget how to forgive
t h e m s e l v e s.
but March no longer means to me
a cocoon in love
with the rainbow butterfly;
you are a silk worm at best
and the soft texture of a blouse
is more the craftswoman’s merit
than anything else
(even when responsibility
aches like this.)
i’ve shown and told love
so much it’s become a tradition
bordering on cliche;
no need to celebrate
my courage or your rejection
anymore;
i choose to be a spring-equinox girl.
Author notes
March 10, 2009
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/M%C4%83r%C5%A3i%C5%9For
A contest entry
- be soulful. by heaven all alone.
1233 points, ended March 24, 16 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - & Integrity by Oleander.
450 points, ended April 4, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Honesty.
Comments
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"you are a silk worm at best / and the soft texture of a blouse / is more the craftswoman’s merit / than anything else"--ouch! This poem feels like an objective view of past events, a declaration of release. Thank you for sharing it.
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I wouldn't change a thing. This poem has a great flow. It speaks of individuality and optimism. I love the whole poem overall, but the ending ties it up with pure expression of integrity. 'I choose to be a spring equinox girl' I'm sure there are deeper meanings as well.
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so good. so good.
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Thank you for entering my contest. I'm looking forward to the final judging round. Best of luck, Götz
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I love the last line of this poem
it is so beautifully strong and I really like seeing you write like this!
Polly
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This is indeed fine, fine writing, and as always your very personal and very poetic voice carries within it an universal appeal. Really like this poem - beautiful and with a wonderful "staying" quality.
~ Nicolette
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Excellent. March to me, brings back lots of memories too, sometimes they sneak up on my though. Loved the last line. Fine, fine writing, and yes, more soulful from you then I am used to.
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... I will definitely finish my homework after I comment on this.
"(of what happened)"
I love that that line is in brackets - it makes it feel like an open secret to me.
I didn't like how 'themselves' was spaced out, but I'm biased against that kind of spacing; I automatically won't like it so that doesn't really mean anything.
"you are a silk worm at best"
What a line - it felt so scathing and well-written.
"spring-equinox girl."
WHAT a phrase...christ. You're good.
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Jessica
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Thank you!
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I love your imagery in this, it's so simple yet so amazingly beautiful at the same time.
Excellent.
♣ Tegan
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Thanks. I'm really glad you liked it
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I love all of your stuff. You're probably one of my favorites on this site.
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