Breathe.
Your eyes are di-s-ma-ntl-ed;
And I can [almost] see your coldblackheart.
So when you /glare\
At me with those
I~ntox~icat~e~d irises,
Remember,
A l w a y s will I smirk back
Because I’ve seen your tears torn apart.
(this.is.where.your.seams.fray)
They think::
She is oh-so-beautiful
When really
You are
Nothing
Under that makeup&&eyeliner.
Nothing.
So sing me a song sweetie,
Because the pitch of your voice r[e[e[k[s of sin,
And the words
Tumbling
from your tongue make me feel
D I R T Y
You make me feel dirty.
And;
Next time
You come crying with lashes stamped together,
I’ll just =laugh=
At those meek attempts for salvation.
Because.
You’ve ruined me
One more time
then acceptable.
Oh;
And honey?
Don’t forget to
b.r.e.a.t.h.e
Author notes
dirtypretty=love.
A contest entry
- Pomegranate Sunrise: Who do you {PUNK} for? by Heartbreaker Eyes.
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Comments
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Great job with this piece.
Nicely written! -
"then" should be "than"
Sorry.
On a more positive note;
WOAH!
This is fabulous!
"Next time
You come crying with lashes stamped together,
I’ll just =laugh=
At those meek attempts for salvation.
Because.
You’ve ruined me"
Dark, and great.
And the ending - really ties it all together.
Great write
Shelly
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hehe thats okay, Thankls so much for your comments too=] I really appreciate the corrections, (i suck at grammer++Spelling..)
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This was a great poem. The emotions stuck out to me when I read it. I LOVED "(this.is.where.your.seams.fray)" It seemed to me like a song lyric or something. A cue in a play, perhaps.
Good luck and thanks for entering the contest! -
cool!
"Oh;
And honey?
Don’t forget to
b.r.e.a.t.h.e"
I LOVE THAT PART!!!
this was wonderfull!!!
♥XoXo♥ -
Old MCR, rad.
Anyways, wow. I love dirty pretty. Hence the contest.
Because the pitch of your voice r[e[e[k[s of sin
I loved that line. This was oh so pretty, and totally epic. Good luck in our contest.
{Sarah.♥}
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loveeeeeee.
I really enjoyed this.
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