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Singled Out

Deep inside a hold so dark.
I wait so patiently.
A wish I hide within the stars,
knowing yet unseen.

Singled out is all the world.
enchanted to my silent call.
Bonding binding tranquil
blossoming by a waterfall.

Tender petals, color strong.
Infinite to the waters flow.
Our thoughts are of the same accord.
were on a level to most unknown.

Quiet rhythm of the trees,
swaying to the tender flow.
Overwhelming empathy.
No longer will I dance alone.

Placed before me is a angel.
Sent to be my waking call.
A gentle voice of understanding.
Sharing secrets ghostly whispers.

Embracing is a mystic light.
Pulsating from enchanted eyes.
You see right through the face I front,
and calm the rapid roaring tides.

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  • Jayde1
    June 21
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    awwww

    this is a very pretty piece my love....
    great from start to finish

    xxxxx


  • awannabepoet
    May 14

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    Your pen has been steady and strong from the very begining I do see with this another fine piece of poetry from your ever so delightful muse.

    I like it, I like it so!

  • narkill
    April 19

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    your poem had great flow. and I enjoyed the fact that it also seemed very open and leveing a wondering feeling. cool poem

  • narkill
    April 19
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    your poem had great flow. and I enjoyed the fact that it also seemed very open and leveing a wondering feeling. cool poe


  • Howard Manser gold member
    April 18

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    EXCELLENT!

    "Singled out is all the world.
    enchanted to my silent call.
    Bonding binding tranquil
    blossoming by a waterfall."

    Still waters run deep in yet undiscovered, uncharted currents. Howard


  • Blue30
    April 16

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    This had a really smooth flow and your words expressed really beautiful imagry. My favorite part was "Quiet rhythm of the trees,
    swaying to the tender flow.
    Overwhelming empathy.
    No longer will I dance alone."


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    April 13

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    Awesome...

    Compelling narrative, rhythm & flow with wonderful imagery that enthrals throughout...
    Keep up the good work...
    Well done!!!


  • tears.of.silence
    March 9

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    Very nice.. I found this poem to flow very well and had a lot of imagery in it. I loved how you said you no longer dance alone. Excellent work.. What exactly do you wish to be in my family? It sounds almost as if this shows as lovers, as boyfriend/girlfriend.... etc.. Just let me know what you wish to be. Thanks for entering Kahy

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