Beak clings tightly to a single sprig
of spring's new vine
detached from shaded cleft of rock,
and dripping sweet with dew of morning
(sweet sky-kisses left on leafy tongues);
dark, black wings now swoop and swoon
upon a drier breeze,
updraft swiftly lifting
to a higher crag, where feet
alight
and sprig is tucked beneath
the twigs of lonesome nest;
fresh vine,
wet and green--
a raven's
simple treasure.
Author notes
Prompts: "Month" song titles:
"First of May"- BeeGees
"A Long December"- Counting Crows
In a list
A contest entry
- 12 months of Melodies by poet2angels.
700 points, ended March 13, 6 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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this is nice, a piece of a natural scene, observed well and carried into creative, rich verses...what the snapshots might mean...this is something that poetry can do, give new life to a common scene...enjoyed...PK
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poetry at its very best. nature at its most beautiful. love, lane
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Wow you did a fantastic job with this poem, wonderfully crafted with you magic pen
The images are very vivid and shine within your words.
Congradulations on the Bronze.
Best to you in all you do.
Tony
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Awesome job and what a brilliant title! Thanks for sharing and keep up the great work! Best wishes to you!
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Excellent write
This was beautiful!
What a wonderful write this is to read and enjoy.
Thanks so much for sharing.
Take acre
Love Peace
campanaro
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We commented on the same piece, hon!
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Congratulations on your award! This is so beautiful as your imagery and metaphor just capture the reader!
Jazzy
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Love your title and wonderful visuals in verse to accompany it. Very nicely done. Congratulations on your shiny bauble. Truly a poem worthy of recognition. It has been too long since I have spent time with your verse. Excellent work. ~Pamela
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Wow
Amazing metaphor and imagery here where beauty speaks to the heart in hues of every season...
"Beak clings tightly to a single sprig
of spring's new vine"
sigh~
This is gorgeous!
Lynda
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loud cheers
This rises and floats like a feather riding currents of air. One must read this aloud - impossible not to.
I feel like I'm sharing the treasure with your raven.
Good luck in the contest.
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I see his shadow,
wing-stretched cloud of flying spirit,
soaring home to rim in pleasure...
just such a wonderful image of what really matters in life's collection of little treasures
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I knew you'd enter and I knew I shouldn't have
WOW what a stunning write from a true poet!
Nothing more to say! Brilliant.
Gaylene
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gosh...
This a beauty!, you've created such wonderful imagery
within this piece here my friend.. great work!
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