It is summer again.
Another year goes by,
and she is not here.
She is not here to hold me,
and tell me it is alright.
She is not here to kiss me me,
and love me in the night.
Oh not again.
Another summer to remind me,
why it is I cry. why it is,
I want to die. It's not fare.
Why did you take her so soon?
She had so much going,
so much love left, to give.
So now I am stuck here all alone.
I can't kill myself, I wouldn't see her
again, if i did that. Because
she was an angel. I guess you needed
her up there to help you out.
But did you need her more then me?
Because without her I am nothing.
Just an empty shell of what used to be a man.
This summer will be the third,
I have gone without her holding me tight.
Oh not again!
This is the last time, I swear!
I can't survive much longer without her....
If I make it through the summer,
it's because you want me to suffer.
To learn lessens I never knew about.
So I ask you to give her back,
or take me to her. Because I wont
make it another summer without her!
Oh no, not again!!!!
Author notes
Well I don't know if this is what you wanted but it flowed from my heart. It is the first prompt, summer. And you wanted it sad, this is what came out. I hope you like it. If not, O' well, I do... lol
A contest entry
- you got my rhythm, i can't move without you baby. by aanika.
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Comments
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Wow..with the anniversary of Danielle's death slowly approaching, this brought tears to my eyes. I've only had one birthday, one summer, one winter, without her and each time, I fall apart. The ending seriously made me sit here and sob for a bit. Great job babe!
love,
mylee -
thanks for entering and putting your emotion into words.
however, there are some things that i didn't like about this.
i found it cliche and lacking in imagery
also you might want to work on your punctuation.
the quadruple exclamation points at the end were unneccesary in my opinion
and you misspelled certain words such as 'fare' --> fair -
Bittersweet memories of a time past, when love flourished and is now gone...Well written!
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i forgive you
Amazing. It made me feel for you-- which is what a good write should do. I really felt it. Especially because it reminded me of a few people very close to me who have died this past year.
Great job!
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