Did you know about stars?
They die, just like dreams.
There's something about looking into the eyes of despair and finding something real. Have you ever stared into nothingness; fake emotions are what makes a man these days, have you noticed heartache? Am I asking too many questions again?
Lies. Do I need to even ask if what you say to me is true these days. I onced believed you, but I used to believe in everything turning out okay, but that died on me too.
I'm sorry, but I can't forgive you. I made that mistake last time and what did that do to my sanity?
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short, but serenade darling, the soul.
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I tell people if God wants to forgive you so be it because if I forgive and you are bound for hell anyway it would just be a waist of my good intentions keep doing well
love the rev papa
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Did you know about stars?
They die, just like dreams.
-LOVEEE.... oof; must you be so good?
Am I asking too many questions again?
-The whole second stanza is just stunning in so many ways, but it is this line that really burns a fire in my eyes.
I LOVE THIS POEM SO MUCH.
--Im not sure how it was before, but it is fantastic now.
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I'm not too into this.
it's too dirty pretty.
and for the beginning
'did you know about stars?
They die, just like we do.'
you should capitalize 'Did'. [:
i like the idea of purple pupils, but you really could've went somewhere with this.
i don't know. i was aiming for more of a prose-yish feel. this is more dirty pretty and i don't like it. try editing it and come back to me.
i won't delete you, i'll give you a chance! [:
try reading the dictionary and finding words that appeal to you. it'll boost your vocab and help out your writing.
if it didn't have the dirty pretty feel, it would be really good. {:
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Edited a bit. Less cliche more... Heartbreak?
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i like it! awesome job. <33
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