To Be SO far away it grew cold as my heart dies these tears dont lie as i lay there and die i never wanted to say goodbye we are so far apart torn to peases i am so lost with out you what am i to do with out you? asll i wanted was your love.
all i wanted was for us to love.
Commet? what doo you think?
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"To Be SO far away it grew cold as my heart dies these tears dont lie as i lay there and die i never wanted to say goodbye"
you need to punctuate, especially here, as you have one huge, rambled run-on sentence that's hard to follow. even if you're writing poetry, punctuation is usually necessary; it helps to separate, classify, control, and pace your poem. a poem with a fullstop at the end of each line would be read slowly and have a lot of pauses, etc. i don't know if you meant this to be poetry or prose, but if it's a poem, space it out like one in stanzas and such. in either case, punctuate. -
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