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Flutter

Things with wings
flutter against my face
Stirring from slumber
Mumbling memories
Blind hands
Unwrap gifts in the dark.

Been a long time.

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  • maria
    March 17

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    I think you could turn this easily into a haiku ... here's my take ....

    wings flutter against my face
    Stirring from slumber--
    Unwrap gifts in the dark


    I like that last line.


    Cheers

    Maria