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That first moment

The first time I saw her
my eyes were transfixed,
like a magnet to metal
I couldn't resist.

Her eyes were like pillows
so comfy and warm,
her legs like a river
flowing and strong.

Her lips, a temptation
that lured with a smile,
her hair like a picture frame
complimenting her style.

She spoke with the quiet
of a butterfly song,
I knew in a moment
my inhibitions were gone.

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  • going nowhere
    March 9

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    the emotions and thoughts you feel when you find that someone can't be put into words easily. you did a good job here of writing about it. and i have to say, i dont think i ever read eyes described as a pillows, but it sounds good.... like those that you can get lost in and daydream. lucky girl to have someone like you to put it in words.


  • lostsouls12
    March 9

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    the first moments of meeting that special person are always the ones you never forget. you expressed that feeling well. it brings me back to a time when i first looked at my ex and knew she would forever hold a piece of my heart.


  • Angierie
    March 9
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    Frick wyatt! U have more talent in u than i could ever hope for!