A best friend you are to me
Together we seem to have been drifting
Towards a road where
Everything is crumbling
Never realised how bad things would get
Today; I read your true thoughts
I have been so wrapped up in myself
Our laughs seem so afar and distant
Now I see what you actually percieve
Shattered inside; now I cry
Eyes red from the showers
Every piece of my soul is aching
Kind thoughts replaced
In fierce flames
Not wanting this pain to remain
Gaining the blade in my grasp
{do I take the final affliction to
dispearse this emotion}
Author notes
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In a list
A contest entry
- Sucide and Cutting and Depression by stargardt13.
550 points, ended October 3, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
erm honest opinion on the poem please
Comments
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My favorite lines were every pice of my soul is aching and in fierce flames. The last two lines were very powerful. Very nice write. Thanks for entering my contest.
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Don't do it! Imagery was superb. I almost felt I was watching and about to lunge for the knife. Well written.
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aw a wonderful acrustic so full of depth and emotion throughout good luck in the contest
maralisa
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