Smiling with teeth that were both green and rotten,
Skeletal frame covered with damp moldy cotton,
He’s knelt for years, motionless on grey bony knees.
It seemed as if he had stayed so long just to please.
The grin on his face was neither happy or warm,
Maggots crawled in his mouth in a wriggling swarm.
Grim welcome to the one who discovers the cave
That hides pirate treasure and has become his grave.
His mother who loved him has given him up for dead.
Frankly, the loss has driven her out of her head.
Many buccaneers described in musty old tomes
Died unburied and unloved so far from their homes.
Author notes
Picture Source: http://www.oceaniacoinandtreasure.com/catalog/9a_1_99_1.JPG
Prompt 3 (7) Wordbank. Words used in this order - Smile, teeth, knees, please, happy, warm, welcome, love, frank, tome
Per contest rules - "Endrance is a pretty man"
A contest entry
- MAKE THIS HUGE!!!! SO MANY PROMPTS TO CHOOSE FROM! by starjacket.
1500 points, ended March 15, 2009, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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wow my brother as always absolutely wonderful.... except the whole maggots part like ewwwwww lol jk kidding its all good... loved it good luck in contest............................!
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Haha. I was wondering if anyone would comment on the maggot part. Glad you liked it. I hope to see you post more of your own work. Thanks for reading and commenting.
Mike
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Wow Chucks, great write! Filled with abundant imagery and truly a delight to read. I love pirate tales. Well done my friend. I wish you all the best.
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Thank you very much. I am glad you enjoyed the poem.
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Thanks so much for fixing your AN, because I think this is a brilliant piece and really wanted to comment on it! I love every bit of this one, my friend! You did a great job using the words! Thnaks for entering and good luck to ya!
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Thanks for reading and commenting. I am glad you enjoyed it. I have been sick and have not been able to write much lately.
Mike
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Enjoyable Read - Excellent
Deep...dark write - Grim welcome to the one who discovers the cave
That hides pirate treasure and has become his grave.
His mother who loved him has given him up for dead. Frankly, the loss has driven her out of her head. -How true though it may not be only gold - we humans often chase after things that bring us far from those who love us - losing time and leaving behind only our unspent treasures for others to find.
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So true. Many people have ended their lives forgotton and lost as the result of chasing something they thought was important.
Glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for reading and commenting.
Mike
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Please edit your AN and I will comment properly. Thanks so much!
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Done.
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This Is a great pirate tale, I didnt want it to end
I wish you all the best in the contest
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Thank you. I am glad you liked it. It only became a pirate tale once it was half written.
Mike
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