you drew graffiti on your eye lids
and noted your reflection
another stranger staring at you
A contest entry
- Whispers of the Muse by SubKitten.
3045 points, ended May 19, 156 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
...tada...
Comments
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Very nicely done! I like that it was so short and still got so much across. I think it might flow a little better to add some kind of punctuation between the second and third lines, just to help that transition along. Overall, it was very well written though!
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thank you, thank you. smiles. I appreciate the comment, thanks for sharing your thoughts.
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Wow..
This is so simple, yet beautiful and full of meaning.
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aw thanks....
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Yes, it never fails to amaze me that so many of us can be strangers to ourselves.Never liking what we see and yet not knowing how to change the person we are.
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you hit the nail on the head with that. . . Thanks for reading. smiles.
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It's so short and seemingly simple and then bam! It says more than an essay on the subject hehe. It's very clever and unique, I truly enjoyed it.
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hey hey, glad you could catch it!
thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts! I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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i definitely had to read it over a few times, but i think i got it. i'm so slow! but it's really good, now that i understand.
kAsSiE
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tehee.
well I'm glad you got it eventually.
Thanks for reading!
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wow. this is just WOW.
i love the progress in this mini piece. it was short, but the emotions that were packed into this was just so intense. and i really liked your eye-catchy metaphors! stunner!
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THank you very much! I'm so glad you could catch all the implied meaning in the words! I appreciate your time and comment!
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This piece is expressive and you truly express yourself well. I think you are a great person and I will have read more of your writes. You truly are a thinker. and I like thinkers.Great piece
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Thank you very much. I appreciate your thoughtful comment. And I will reply to your message as soon as possible. Thanks for taking the time to come by.
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WOW! Alot said with soooooo few words! Great job hon!
And it is a fact that we do try to hide that way isn't it? Amazing write here! I love it!
and love
Nyetta
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Thanks for the comment Nyetta!
We do try to hide away this way far too often.
thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts!
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i read this twice.. the first time i was like uh i don't get it
then i came back and read it again. and the title and the poem clicked. very nicely written.
I like the idea of drawing on the mirror to mask yourself
beautifully written.
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ha ha, nice. well thanks for giving it a second try.
Thanks for reading and commenting! tahee
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