Aestivation;
1. the act of spending or passing the summer.
It’s June and though her birthday’s in December she is being reborn today. The fields are filled with daisies and possibilities while she is filled with the power to string them all together into the summer of her life. Beneath her still translucent skin he saw the rivers of her veins and told her softly they matched his and this was proof that they belonged.
She believed him and took his hand as the rivers of their blood flowed towards the ocean.
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2. the arrangement of flower parts in a bud.
July, and she is following the example of the flowers and learning what it means to effloresce.
He is the rain and the sunlight that allows her to grow, the inspiration in her eyes and the glow on her cheeks. She opens herself up to him, petal by petal, and hopes that he likes the colour of her heart.
He tells her she is beautiful and promises to always be her reason to grow.
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3. the practice of certain animals sleeping throughout the summer.
August, and she lies on her bed and drifts lifelessly into eternal hibernation. She wilts in the absence of the sun that touched her heart and drowns in the truth of the rain he left behind.
In June he had lied, their veins may have matched but their hearts always clashed. Though she timed her heart beat to his he would never belong to her.
And she would always belong to him for he would always be her reason
just as he told her in July.
Pity he failed to mention he would take that reason away.
Author notes
Loosely based on last summer. And also inspired by Hollie. I owed her a poem, I just wish it didn't have to be a sad one. 
The numbered bits are definitions of the word "aestivation" and then there's also a month of the summer in each verse...I liked the idea but not really how it turned out, especially towards the end.
Any advice?
-abi x x x
What do you guys think??
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sweet
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This is such....
This is such a cool, sad poem abi. I felt my eyes go moist as i read it.
Please write more
from lizzie moffy xox
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nice
i liked they style (definitions), and how the parts after flowed with the definition to tell a story. pretty awesome. sad that she doesn't break free at the end though.
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I luv words with the "ae" next to each other, for some strange reason. "aestivation", "faeries", "hyphae" etc. They look so sophisticated! Hmmm........so, how soon are you writing that bestseller, huh?
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antastic write
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'He is the rain and the sunlight that allows her to grow, the inspiration in her eyes and the glow on her cheeks. She opens herself up to him, petal by petal, and hopes that he likes the colour of her heart.'
This is wonderful wording and imagery. This poem was so sweet and full of emotion. The ending of course also made me sad but that's good that you can tug at someone's emotions with your words, it's a powerful talent. I also think the set up was very well thought out, with the definitions of aestivation.
As for criticism I don't see much that could/should be changed about it. It already has a nice flow, I don't find any of the line awkward. Just keep up the great work ( :
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ohmygosh.. this is so beautiful
it made me cry so much
becuase I can relate....
i love you
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Aw, Hollie dear, I didn't mean to make you cry.
Although I'm glad you thought it was beautiful because it was written partially for you. I figured I owed you a poem. Sorry it had to be so crappy and sad...but it was written with love if that helps.
I'm kind of really busy tonight and the next but I'll try make time to talk to my lovely oldest daughter, ok?
Can't promise much though.
I love you too
Stay strong.
-abi x x x
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I'm glad you did. I feel better now
aww you dont owe me anything but thankyou
it was not crappy!
its okay. I'm glad your busy, its good that you have things too do
I'll try abi
x x x x
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Promise to never stope prose-ing. k? Cause this is simply brilliant.
She believed him and took his hand as the rivers of their blood flowed towards the ocean.
-This line is superb.
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