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Cobwebs




Pilfered breath
beats upon faltered strings,
replaying yesterday’s ache

exploiting wrinkled worries
of sweet tonic;
never to quench

options narrow

when leeway tows
a current
of dry tides...

with edge lost
to checkmate

 

 

“chance”
was just a 
grey dream



in a colorful world~

 

 

 

 

 

 



 

Author notes

Pic Prompt:www.postsecret.com
Between 30-60 words
Poem: 43

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  • PerfectImperfection
    March 31

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    WOW. This is an amazing piece to go along with the prompt. Very well spoken, with an incredible presence of depth. Thank you for your entry!


    • jasminerose
      March 31
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      Well double wow for me
      Thank you so much for the lovely compliment and for the silver award!!! I am so honored and so delighted you enjoyed my entry!!!!
      Thank you Wendy
      I'll be looking forward to the next contest as they are always inspiring!
      Jazzy


  • Poetic Tasha Moderators member
    March 22

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    wonderfully written take on the prompt, perfect ending, well done,
    best of luck

    Tasha


    • jasminerose
      March 22
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      Hi Poetic Tasha,
      Thank you so very much for the wonderful comment! I am so glad you enjoyed this!!!
      Jazzy


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    March 14

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    Sigh I love this, I see you are one of these poets who has the best ending line for every occassion. I can't wait to read more.

    • jasminerose
      March 14

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      Always love to hear I can make another talented poet Sigh~
      Thank you!!! I am so very delighted you have added me to your favs
      Linda


  • ScarletO gold member
    March 9
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    Love the ending to this,,finalizes the poem perfectly.


  • Fug-azi
    March 9

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    I love great endings and this is a really, really great one.

    Everything is there sweet sis, from the hope to the failed hope.

    • jasminerose
      March 9
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      Awww Colin, your compliments make me smile Thank you for sharing your wonderful thoughts about my poems with me!
      Always a pleasure!!
      Jazzy


  • wtchr
    March 9

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    So Sad

    To exhibit despair so completely, one must have known it. I'm sorry that you ever did. I think I'll send you a giggle letter. Very well written.

    • jasminerose
      March 9
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      Hi Sam,
      I think we have all felt this kind of despair so no worries my friend!
      Thank you for such a sweet comment and for always bringing a smile to my heart!
      Linda


  • Harrisham Minhas
    March 9

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    A sad but splendidly crafted poem.
    Good luck in the contest, friend.



    • jasminerose
      March 9
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      Thank you so very much Harrisham for the wonderful compliment!! Always so wonderful to hear your thoughts on my poems!!
      Linda


  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    March 9

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    Oh ...my....God.
    this is amazing! I love it

    "beats upon faltered strings,
    replaying yesterday’s ache"

    "“chance”
    was just a
    grey dream



    in a colorful world~" Absolutely love this ending!!!

    awesome write.





    • jasminerose
      March 9
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      Awww thank you Catie
      I am so very delighted you enjoyed this so!!!
      Linda


  • poet2angels gold member
    March 8

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    Another amazing piece

    "“chance”
    was just a
    grey dream



    in a colorful world~"

    You are the master of the perfect ending, bff

    Lynda

    • jasminerose
      March 8
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      Awwww thank you so much bff.... a smile is what you always give to me... even when I write like this
      sssss
      Jazzy


  • Nom de Plume
    March 8

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    beautiful write to your prompt, would we make the same mistakes if we had the chance again? not sure we wouldnt ... good luck

    • jasminerose
      March 8
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      Thank you for the lovely comment and profound thought to answer... I will pass at the moment
      Always wonderful to hear your thoughts on my poems!
      Thank you
      Linda

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