You used me.
You insult me.
You disgust me.
You are love.
Think about what will 'really' happen in the end.
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A whole twist to the idea of love
instead of all the ups, you burdened the reader with the downs. Very interesting. Its against our eyes to want to see, but you carried much truth within love. Well done
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Ouch!
Although I think I understand why you would write something like this, I don't agree with the sentiments expressed.
Love is light, compassionate and affection when in the presence of true love. Not the superficial love that you seem to be referring to.
Thought inspiring piece. -
That damn love!
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How true.
How VERY VERY smart you are to realize this. Love is risky at best, but somehow our hormones and instincts send us on this journey of insanity. 
A fine poem!
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All I could think of was "Ouch."
=]
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Love does all that, so many times. But I do tell you, that's not really love. But I really feel bad that you've felt like that. Been there, felt it... and it's not good at all.
I like how this piece is so short, and rough. Not everyone can make a short writing.
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Pointed
Pointed like a stick jabbed in your arm. Love hurts...as Gram Parsons said...we can be one sided here and your side is eloquent. Hope you see the other sometime - though this probably means you already have! Might think about a real title, the dot/full stop is OK but gimmicky, this deserves better. -
love responsible for all of this . still not enough it has done more damage than only these
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hmm. do you love abuse? i can actually relate i was in a bad relationship but we were obsessed with each other so it was like this for a while.
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Says a lot with so little. Good.
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I almost missed this poem because of the period for a title!
Well, it's short and hardly sweet, but it is very meaningful and concise at the same time. It's certainly a harder take on the meaning of love, but at times very true. Love can be rough, after all.
Thanks for sharing your thoughts with us, and keep writing.
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this is great....
so true, this is wat true love is like....
it can be very painful and hurtful....
this is a great piece, short and to the point
your Faerie
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Contradiction in terms
Pointing via pointless points
may seem to weed the chaff from grain,
yet mirror image self-anoints
lead nor to gain nor hope again -
Short...
I feel a little left hanging and not realy it he best way.... what i would've done is spent more time saying what they do to make me mad, use some alliterations and emotions, then i would turn it around and say, but blah blah blah however you feel he is love, then explain that then maybe end with and you may have thought you pused and shoved me away
But all you did was pull me closer in... But you dont have to thats just what i would do... but this is good! -
There there, cheer up guy!
Powerful stuff there, Chuck! keep it up. -
It's amazing how four lines can reveal so much.
The fact that you said 'used' shows that there was something in the past. But now 'insult' and 'disgust' are present feelings and actions.
And the title as a '.' makes me believe you didn't want to unnecessarily convolute the poem that through it's simplicity still remains so beautiful and sad. -
Clearly very heartfelt writing, short and punchy writing.
Keep it up
Jeff
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