It all falls away, now that your gone.
It is over, it is done.
So why do I still want you?
Why do I still need you.
No it's not true.
It's all a lie. I lie to myself.
Hoping it wont hurt as much.
You stole my heart, then broke it.
You laughed at my pain,
which made it worse.
For the first time in six years,
I have cried.
I cried because I was broken,
and I thought that I,
would never again be whole.
I cried because, you never loved
me, as I loved you. As I wanted
you to love me.
I have cried, and cried.
I tried to be the one you needed,
but it wasn't true. Not with you.
I tried to be the one you wanted,
but it wasn't me. Meant to be.
So I gave you up, like a smoker,
because it is bad for their health.
Thats why I quit you, you were bad
for my health. Changing who I was,
changing my dreams. Trying to
change me. But I quit you.
But no more tears will I shed for you.
No more pain can you cause my heart.
For I am heartless now, because of you.
I don't care, I don't want to.
I don't cry, because there are
no more tears left to shed.
My tear ducts are dried,
I have cried, and cried, and cried!
A contest entry
- It all falls away by Puking Faerie Dust.
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I understand the pain and heartache portrayed in this write, I have felt it many times before.. but it felt a bit theatrical and cliche when I read it. Still, I enjoyed it very much and can relate very well. I hope things have gotten better for you. Thank you for entering
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Crying is the eyes way of washing away things they saw and dont want to remember.
love,
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I can definitely sense the deep emotional content that you are trying to convey here and you do so well.
I do think that if you minimized on your use of repetition, it wouldn't take away from the power of this piece. That's just my opinion though... -
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Hey I toned it down for more imagery. Better right?
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yeah
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