"That is the substance, this the shadow; that the reality, this the dream."
-- E.S. Phelps
As darkness descends
I am left alone
with dreams as constant friends.
They bring to mind
moments of old.
They unravel and unwind
the knotted ball
of unspoken words
which is our all...
Which will always be
the only reality
between you and me.
Author notes
Option 1: Quote by E.S. Phelps.
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I like this. Imagery is good. Flows well. And fits the prompt. Thanks for sharing this with us. And thanks for entering it into my contest.
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Nicely written piece!
Good flow and imagery here, I love your take on the quote.
Bravo
♥ Kate -
welcome to allpoetry
that was splendid, I really enjoyed what you did with the prompt,the lines about unspoken words and it being the reality.. awesome.well done on this and thanks for sharing this with us here, good luck in the contest,and keep up the writing,
cheers
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Welcome to Allpoetry
An effective take on the prompt, quite short and to the point. The use of "knotted ball" was some really great imagery.
Welcome to Allpoetry and thank you for entering our contest
I hope that you enjoy the site, and if you have any questions please don't hesitate to ask
Good luck!
Good job, keep writing!
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Welcome to AllPoetry...
Wow! I really can say I was pleased to read this. It made me think of my friends now & in the past. Here & gone. Good luck in the contest. In Love & Light... BLessed Be! ~~Iridessa MoonFlower~~
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This poem made me wonder where it was going... the ending was kind of painful for me, really. It's so realistic and raw. Good luck in the contest!
~Diana
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Welcome to AllPoetry
Short but powerful ~
I agree with Polly about this being an emotive poem; there is sadness in this that just works so well on the page
Excellent abckground choice as well
Thank You for Your Entry & Best of Luck
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~Manda
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This is a really emotive poem - by the end of it I just felt like it was a big sigh - very sad, but very well written I really like the flow and the ease of this poem, and the take on the prompt is great!
Keep writing
Polly
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Lovely imagery, a great flow... all in all, a very good piece!! Congratulations, this is a poem to be proud of. I hope you come to enjoy this site as much as I do, and in the meantime, please don't hesitate to come find me if you have any questions!
Best of luck with this and future contests,
Maria
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wow! I really enjoyed this piece! It was so moving and powerful with such few words. I also enjoyed the background you chose for the poem, as it elicits a certain kind of emotion that works well with the poem! thanks for sharing.
liZ
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Welcome to Allpoetry
This is beautiful, and I love the imagery towards the end. It actually reminds me of an activity I used to use when I was a retreat-leader back in the day... I'll never forget it
Just a tip: Capping the first letter of every line isn't necessary, unless its the start of a new idea or thought. Plain ol' lowercase letters will work just fine there
Well done & thank you so much for entering!
Laura
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