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Spongebob

                                                  He has yellow slots that are very big.
                                                        He has a snail named Gary.
                                                        A sponge  that eats Kelp o.
                                                            Patrick is his best friend.
                                                              He is very dumb.
                                                                He never passed driving school,
                                                                      and took it 38 times.Oh boy
                                                                          he has a lot of fines.
                                                                  At the end of the day,he kills a laugh,
                                                                    but doesn't take a bath.
                   

                                                                       

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  • cazzy71
    July 6
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    I like this

    Fun,well put together,I like it loads.

  • misterfish
    June 30
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    Thanks heaps for entering. That is a really good piece of work you should be proud.


  • NooNiThEWitcH
    June 29

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    This is not what I am looking for but at least I got to know who Sponge Bob is coz I never watched the show.

    Thank you for entering my contest.
    Good luck.

    Nooni


  • explain.everything
    June 14
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    i agree with the last person to comment. this is not poetry. its just random statements. they dont even flow together. and its all free verse until the last four lines that just so happen to kinda rhyme. it looks like something a first grader would write. just choppy sentences.


  • dieu.
    June 13
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    thumbs down.

    All you did was write random statements about spongebob.

    he has a snail named gary.
    patrick is his best friend.
    he is very dumb.

    that's NOT poetry, in any way.

    • cirque du soleil
      June 26
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      ...i have just been reading your comments on each others work....
      give the kid a break....you and I know you're brilliant, even if he/she doesn't


  • SmartBrick
    April 8

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    Dude, SpongeBob is the BOMB diggity!(*tick tick*hee!)I love all the details you gave! BTW, according to the last episode spongebob is in where he's at boating school, it is 54 times, jsuk!Anyway, awesome!

    Signed,
    THE ONE AND ONLY SMARTBRICK

    K.flo


  • Patched Up Ragdoll
    March 30
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    booted

  • peadiotrocity10
    March 22
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    Good poem!

    This is funny.

  • peadiotrocity10
    March 22
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    I thought this was funny.Great Job!


  • just4fun20
    March 12
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    this is good but not what im looking for at all

  • Sky Prince Ireland gold member
    March 8
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    Quite good I enjoyed it.
    Thanks for sharing.
    Brian


  • Sir Squigglim
    March 8
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    Oh man, that's just amusing!


    Very well done, because we all love Spongebob

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