Once again I am asked
To define what truly makes me myself,
To display who I am for all to see,
To retrieve from my internal shelf
The tiniest sliver of my soul
And provide a most picturesque whole...
I can't possibly do this,
This dissection of me!
How can I put down on paper
Every aspect? Each piece of debris?
Do you truly expect me to say
What makes me me and why I act this way?
If this is what you came for,
Well I'm sorry- I really can't share
Every last facet of who I am.
And although I'd truly love to compare,
I'm still delving into my own mystery,
A quest to define my true identity.
Since I can't quite tell you who I am,
At least not now and at this time,
I'll give you another chance
To begin the adventurous climb
Towards my self-discovery...
Here's to your [hopeful] recovery!
I will, for now, allow
A momentary peer
Into what is not me...
Do you still wish to volunteer?
If yes, it's about that time where we should start.
If no, then I do believe it's time for us to part.
Let me tell you
Just who I'm not.
Although I'm not always remembered,
I'm not the girl that's easily forgot.
I'm not, in any way, perfect,
And yet I'm not the social reject.
I'm not often found with a frown upon my face,
But I'm not always the happiest person around.
I certainly am not homely,
Then again, I'm not the prettiest girl in town.
I'm not the one that screams impatiently,
But I'm also not the one that waits with glee.
I'm hardly ever picky about the food I eat,
And yet some things get me every time.
I'm not a dramatic person, but on occasion
You'll find I'm not so passive to your crime.
I'm not dainty, delicate, or even fair,
Yet I'm not grubby, hostile, or filled with a stubborn air.
I'm not here to be trampled on,
But I'm also not here to walk over anyone.
I'm not one to go to the extreme,
And yet I'm not often one to be outdone.
I'm not the quickest to open my mouth and roar,
However, I'm not always an advocate for the anti-war.
I'm not made out of rubber,
I doubt you're made of glue,
I'm not always going to bounce back
But I'm not one to be subdued.
I'm not made out of sticks or stones,
But words don't always break my bones.
I'm not you.
You can't possibly be me.
I'm not all that and a bag of chips,
But I'm not just an identity.
I'm not all that easy to define,
But one day all that's in me will align.
Author notes
Just another take on the identity bit... tell me what you think!
I'm considering removing the fifth stanza, any comments on that?
MysteriousWhisper: I'd love to be your Fav Cousin or bestest Bud or even Sister 
...PS: sorry for the rhyme- it's kind of what i do lol
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"I can't possibly do this,
This dissection of me!
How can I put down on paper
Every aspect? Each piece of debris?
Do you truly expect me to say
What makes me me and why I act this way?”
These are my favourite lines! Thanks for entering my contest and good luck.
-heva♫
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A wonderful read, very well done with clear thought and language and thank heavens someone can see the worth of this piece. Congrats of the golds and well deserved they are too.
Sheila
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thank you so much!!! haha your comments all induced massive smiles on my face haha... i'm truly happy to read this :]
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Such an amazing reformation of identity. It almost gives hope to those who read it saying even if you don't know who you are, you can still figure out who you aren't to either help you or at least feel good about what you don't do. Ansolutely great work!
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awh!!! thank you so much! i knew it was different, but i never truly expected the reaction it would get lol but i love it!
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I think this is perfect. You grapsed every area of 'who one is and isn't' Outstanding work.
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wow. thank you! truly, thank you for this- you may have just made my day lol
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I really like this. Very honest. The rhyme was tasteful and I didn't mind it at all . Anyways you can be my sister definitely! good luck in the contest!
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yay! another family member!!!
and, as you are not a fan of rhyme, i am ecstatic to see that you approve of mine and yes, honesty is definitely something i try to keep within my pieces... it's kind of what i do lol!
welcome to my family
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By telling what you're not you helped tell me who you are, and I think you did a wonderful job of doing it. Oh, and don't change anything. This is quite perfect how it is. Great write my friend.
Lauren
Good luck in the other contests.
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wow, thanks so much!!! comments like yours are the reason why i keep writing, they mean so much more than any trophy could!!!
thanks again
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I really like your poem. I accept the offer and I will be your aunt. Thank you and hugs,
Auntie Marie
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lmao thanks auntie!
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Yeah!
This was so well done! I can't believe you did such a good job describing yourself. I got a chuckle out of a few of those lines! ha ha. You definately have a knack for writing! loved it!
Bravo!
Justified Inc.
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lmao thank you so much for your enthusiasm!!
i loved writing this piece, and i'm glad to have been able to get such a positive response for it! thank you for the fabulous comment, and i genuinely appreciate everything you said here [especially about my having a knack! yay!] lol
thanks again!
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Very nice.
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thanks for the comment!
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Gifted write!
Profound and honest,
wonderful.
Thanks for sharing this my friend.
As always
Love Peace
campanaro
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thank you for putting your input on this one as well! i always love to hear from you, as you know thanks again for the wonderful comment!
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wow, like, this was totally kewl. I loved the repitition and the way it flowed, and the way it made sense even though you were rhyming (like, some ppl go out on tangints that make NO sense just to make it rhyme, u didn't). and i loved the honesty of this. really awesome!
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wow, thanks for the awesome comment! haha i know what you mean about the whole 'going off on a tangent' thing lol- i find it annoying at points too, and that's why i deliberately try to keep it out of my works lol, and i always try to be 100% honest in them! i think it's kind of important...
thanks again for stopping by
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what i think??
this poem just made my day!!
I LOVE IT!!
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awh! thanks so much!!!! XD
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Amazing write
This is a beautiful right. I can understand it myself100%. I don't know who I am, But I know I am not.
It has been my life work, trying to solve this problem.
Now for the poem. The structure was great, The flow was awesome. And the rhyme didn't looked forced.
This over all was a great write. And all the more so for the length of it. It is not always easy to write such a good long and flowing piece. Great job. Keep up the great work, my favorite part is...
I'm not here to be trampled on,
But I'm also not here to walk over anyone.
I'm not one to go to the extreme,
And yet I'm not often one to be outdone.
I'm not the quickest to open my mouth and roar,
However, I'm not always an advocate for the anti-war.
I'm not made out of rubber,
I doubt you're made of glue,
I'm not always going to bounce back
But I'm not one to be subdued.
I'm not made out of sticks or stones,
But words don't always break my bones.
I'm not you.
You can't possibly be me.
I'm not all that and a bag of chips,
But I'm not just an identity.
I'm not all that easy to define,
But one day all that's in me will align.
Author notes
Once again great write
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wow! thanks so much for the positive comment! haha it really had me smiling... i'm glad to see you liked it
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This is actually a very magnificent piece. The inner self of you that you are and not. Expressively delightful and powerfully portrayed. Stunning write.
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Thanks so much for the great and honest comment! It means alot that you took the time to read it...
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Beautiful
So you are a person of contradictions what is wrong with being a unique and beautiful you, that does not need to be defined. One can't truly DEFINE a person, for you can live alongside the same people your whole life and never be truly understood. Just don't be afraid to show the real you, and be the real you, because that unique YOU is beautiful. Love the poem. Hope you didn't mind my two cents.
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Haha thanks so much! I actually happen to agree, 100%! ...How could I ever mind hearing from you? And especially with such great, honest, and true remarks?! It is an honor that you even chose to write me a comment, and it is greatly appreciated
Thanks so much for it all! and I'm ecstatic to see that you liked it :]
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