He takes revenge, Oh Mina…
You tasted from his blood…
Vampire’s spirit that flows
Through your veins
Controls your mind,
Makes you blind vampire’s lover,
Hypnotically bonded to the monster.
You're slowly succumb to the vampire’s blood,
The subtle pain of kiss switch back and forth
From the consciousness to the bloody trance.
You have connected to your lover by
Telepathy senses of Dracula,
The greatest of Transylvania vampires.
Oh Mina, your strength is overcome the feeling…
Sundown comes not soon enough…
…And from your weakness grab your strength –
Stab bloody lover strait to the heart and
Shear vampire’s head with no regret.
You're tremble, eyes are full of fright.
The monster turned to dust, you set yourself free...
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Topics:
Fantasy(vampires ect....)
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I read Bram Stoker's Dracula, one of the best written books i have read, and this has the idea, Mina the conflicted lover who became the center of a great struggle, between forces outside and inside of her...this is very well done, captures the essence... PK
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Yes I shall admit I am a major vamp. fan. This is a wondrful poem. I like the title it's original. a very wonderful write.
Lines Worth Remebering:
Sundown comes not soon enough…
…And from your weakness grab your strength –
Stab bloody lover strait to the heart and
Shear vampire’s head with no regret.
You're tremble, eyes are full of fright.
The monster turned to dust, you set yourself free...
I love these they capture the traditional vampire ledgend.
Thnaks for Entering.
Kathryn -
Thank you for adjusting. I really like this poem and the first reason being it has my favorite name as the title. Mina.. second its well written
Favorite lines:
"You're slowly succumb to the vampire’s blood,
The subtle pain of kiss switch back and forth
From the consciousness to the bloody trance."
Good poem. goodluck in the contest
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• if you would please space your name out in your AN like this : X x D r o w n . M e . D r y X x . Just out a space between each of your letters. Please. If you chose not to thats fine but i would like you you give me a reason. thank you for putting your user name but i need it spaced like previously specified.
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I like this poem, as Elavina said I think it is great the you have used the original Dracula story. I like the last line alot.
"The monster turned to dust, you set yourself free..."
It is strong and intense. Unfortunately I just likes some of the other poems a little more, it's just a matter of my personal tastes so please don't take offence. Thank-you so much for your entry.
Inside -
Wow
Wonderful write, I really loved how you went back to the original vampire story. well done.
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This is very good. I like your writting style and the ending is beautifully crafted. Thank-you for entering.
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