I glide on the rhythmic water,
rising to meet the sun at first dawn.
Floating on the waves,
enjoying the new day;
my fins glitter silver
under the majestice sun.
I can hear the distant crashing
of waves upon rocks.
I can see an endless sea
spreading before me.
I dive with force,
plunging into enigmatic depths.
Living, mesmerizing colours, I see;
of orange, of yellow and of red.
Starfish and Rainbowfish...
Killer Whales saying 'hello';
playing with my fins,
I tease their black expanse.
Of seaweed and algae a-plenty,
of shaped rocks,
and naughty sharks nodding their heads
as I pass them.
Sunken ships galore,
with treasures never seen before;
gold pieces, coins and mighty swords,
and colourful jewels on my skin I try.
I am a Mermaid of the sea,
always swimming wild and free.
By: Nada Adel Sobhi
Author notes
title: Aquamarine Dreams
I did not implicity say "aquamarine dreams" but I used it for inspiration and I hope you get the image I tried to paint with my words.
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The ending of this poem was just pefect. Great work. You've got a 3 for this poem bringing your total to 33. thanks for entering the contest and bets of luck to you. kahy
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Best of luck in my contest..
This is just the first time looking at all
the poems in my contest .. please do not respond.
Riftkin
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Very Sea-ful!!!
Loved your imagery- especially when you revealed y7ou were a mermaid!!! Kisses, Kitty
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great write. I loved the picture you were able to paint with your words. I think I will read this to the little one when she comes. Great write and keep up the good work.
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Well done
You almost literally took me into the sea. You're right I did escape for a while, thanks!
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I love it.
Wonderful write. Very descriptive. I love writing about water-related things. Keep up the beauty of your poetry!
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such a descriptive piece! i love the imagery portrayed here. here's my favorite part:
"Of seaweed and algae a-plenty,
of shaped rocks,
and naughty sharks nodding their heads"
very nice write! it's so uplifting and light hearted. a nice break for a lot of the depressing stuff on here..
=)
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Cute, I love the idea, Mermaids are always fun and you definetely fleshed her out in a happy way, its always rewarding to find a happy note to a poem. And it works, it definetely does.I especially love the line "Suken ships galore with treasure never seen before" Its amazing and i love the sense of wonder and mystery it presents even to your mermaid of whose domain the sea is. It is a very fresh take on a cliched ideal and it is done very well, good rhymes, good character, nice lenght, overall a very very good job. I thouroughly enjoyed it
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Pleasant read with some good choices of words. My favourite part =>
Sunken ships galore,
with treasures never seen before;
gold pieces, coins and mighty swords,
and colourful jewels on my skin I try.
I am a Mermaid of the sea,
always swimming wild and free.
Nice dream.
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Ah, a most romantical delving into the deep domain of Davey Jones himself... very deftly penned fantastical piece of verse... bravo...
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beautiful, fresh and very uplifting
i could feel the water and its freshness on my skin. feeling hope with the atmosphere of freedom and new born day and sun and the warmth in all the entourage welcoming the happy mermaid.
beautifully written and description is dazzling beautiful
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You never cease to amaze me I swear!
I could tell what "you" were before you said such imagery is wonderful
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that was just great nooni heh i figured out that you were a mermaid just a few lines in but it was a great write i really loved it
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No problem, let me know if you can't work with and I'll give you another.
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