Words’ sweet connections make us whole
to paint our thoughts in pen and ink
as language binds us soul to soul.
We leave a hint of stated goal,
a leitmotif we seldom think,
words’ sweet connections make us whole.
Sometimes we scrape against the shoal
and curse the muse that lets us sink.
As language binds us soul to soul
releasing floods of self-control
that brings us safely from the brink,
words' sweet connections make us whole.
The cares of life can take a toll
but poetry provides a link
as language binds us soul to soul.
For when the night is deep as kohl,
and loneliness a brew to drink,
words’ sweet connections make us whole
as language binds us soul to soul.
Author notes
I feel the three primary elements of poetry are language, device and rhythm.
A Villanelle is a nineteen-line poem consisting of a very specific rhyming scheme:
aba aba aba aba aba abaa.
The first and the third lines in the first stanza are repeated in alternating order throughout the poem, and appear together in the last couplet (last two lines).
In a list
A contest entry
- Three Sides Of The Pyramid...Focus The Elements by Blue Rew.
2800 points, ended March 9, 2009, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Another great write by you. I love this poem. Well done!!
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Villanelles are a labor of expression...
Yours not only adheres to form requirements, but
does so in a manner that is pleasing and easily absorbed. Nice interplay of title to prompt.
I really was pleased to see kohl used here and leitmotif, two jewels that sparkled for me.
Very fluid piece that makes an impression. Blue
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Very strong anchor lines in this Villanelle. Your title is captivating and draws the reader in.
Your closing stanza sums it up beautifully.
A very easy to read Villanelle. This is not an easy form to master as many times it can sound forced with so much repetition, but you have handled it beautifully.
Truly enjoyable. Thank you for a lovely entry. Best of luck in the judging. ~Pamela
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this reads very well, and I looked at the words that show, strong action words, that carry a narrative in the form, i think this is very skillful, a strong voice, expression, and message in the structure of this well conceived form... PK
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