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Death at a Glance

His golden wings fluttered down
catching my tears
before they fell.
Perfect spheres of a beautiful
sapphire penetrated the murky
depths of my soul.
A gentle kiss melted my fears
until they were no more
substantail than hope.
That was the first time I saw him.

An invisible blade struck
the crumbling wall of my heart.
The sapphire spheres
of beauty turned upon themselves
in battle to form
a dusty ebony.
His forced touch creeped
its way into my mind
until it's forever burned
into my soul.
That was the last time I saw him.

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  • monu
    March 12

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    GOOD JOB

    its good but a little obscure, some spelling mistakes, but what i liked was that you presented a very common issue, very beautifully, short and sweet


  • The Reaper Beast
    March 7
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    awsome

    that poem rocks


  • Ravynna
    March 7
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    dark, creepy and sad. PERFECT!

    total luff.