In the autumn of life is a yellow tree
That shines out its beauty for all to see
No longer young and fresh and green
But even more lovely from colours unseen
From deep inside its heartbeat glows
Along each branch its life’s blood flows
A last blaze of glory before it dies
Celebrating life under warm blue skies
Still strong, offering shelter from icy blasts
A cosy haven from storms that pass
Golden and shining in the light
An enfolding roost in the dark of night
I am but a dove, dear golden tree
Protect me within and care for me
Author notes
Something yellow and autumn.
A contest entry
- Yellow Yellow Yellow by Kiddy.
400 points, ended April 9, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is a very elegant poem; your use of words is wonderful, painting a vivid picture. Very good write.
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Thank you for your kind comment Patrick, I do appreciate it.
Sheila
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We are kindred
http://allpoetry.com/poem/2807224
I have spent much of my life in the embrace of trees -
each quatrain is brilliantly structured. Couplet could have been better. I loved this one. Nice title.
Kiddy's score - 38/40
Dr. Veer's score - 38/40
Total - 76/80
All the best
Love
Kiddy
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Beautiful Sheila, I am a tree hugger...enjoyed this...
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Thanks fellow tree hugger. I love trees too and to see one being cut down when it is healthy and it has taken so many years to grow really makes me sad. If you have time, take a look at my poem The Chestnut Tree and I have written about life from the trees point of view, over the years of standing on a village green. I am sure you will like it. Sheila
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It is indeed a very calming, somewhat thought-provoking poem. The simply rhyming and wording accentuates the simple beauty of the poem, the color, and meaning. A simple typographical error is "cosy" instead of "cozy" in the line "A cosy haven from storms that pass".
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Thank you Nick for taking the time to read and comment on my poem. Sometimes simplicity is the only way for me with writes of nature. It is useless to try and improve on natural things with words. As for the typing/spelling error of the word cosy - I think you will find I am correct on this side of the world. Cosy = UK Cozy = USA and I use the UK spell check so we are both correct. Sheila
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You got it in one Fritz. I have my own reasons why I wrote that from a photo of a certain tree. Glad you thought it was OK, thanks for reading. Sheila
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Aww, this is gorgeous...
Such wonder imagery portrayed throughout...
Compelling narrative that spoke to me not only of the tree but also as a metaphor for a time of life (although that might be my weird mind...
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Beautifully told...
Well done!!!
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Protected you will most certainly be,
safely esconced in your yellow tree.
Hilly xxxx
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Can you picture me sat up there?
With a cup of tea and a comfy chair.
Sheila
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Thank you Josy, that was a lovley comment to make. Sheila
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Hi Sheila,
This is like a sonnet . It has such depth in it. Good rhymes and flow.I like it a lot.
Josy
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Ah, just lovely dear, and the rhyme and flow were superb!
All the best,
mj.
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That was very kind of you to stop by and comment. Always appreciated MJ thank you. Sheila
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