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Leaf 18


 
  
 

Leaves

goes away

forsakes

breaks faith

with love and home

takes the wind-carousel

that fills the valleys

with far-fairground bluster

plays at gypsying

runs off

at night

and wakes

foreign

 

 

Leaves

wills and

bequeaths

keepsakes and remembrance

of what was within

the grasp of a hand –

the blade’s laughter

(keep in your mind

 summer

 was only

 joking)

 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

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  • Mercury Rising
    March 31

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    Beautiful

    A fallen leaf to press between the turning pages of your fabulous folio. This wonderful poem has a sense of what the Japnese call 'Mono No Aware', which translates as a 'sensitivity to ephemera', and a 'feeling for the fleetingpathos of existence', as in the short-lived and lovely cherry blossoms. A really terrific piece of poetry, Mairi.


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      March 31
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      Thank you David. It is one of a series on the same theme - leaves as the holders of memory.


  • a59teeth
    March 29

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    Lovely!!

    the author's notes are also a particularly nice touch!! the last four lines are genius. it is the 'wind-carousel' and the two lines above it that are my favorite though. this also is Very well worded!!!

    • Mairi bheag gold member
      March 30
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      Thank you.

      I wonder if you would like to read through the whole of this "leaf" series? Just click on the link above for the list "variations on a theme by 'bird".

      I don't come here very often at present, so I can't promise one-for-one reciprocal reads, but I'll try.

  • Purrsanthema
    March 16
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    I too love the last 4 lines. A lovely fantastically imaginative fantasy.


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    March 14

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    Gorgeous. Breath-taking.

    I love leaves. Autumn leaves. So this poem spoke to my soul in the most fascinating ways.

    Your mind makes great leaps others are not capable of - in your descriptions. Impressive.

    Can't wait to read more. Buddy referred me to you!


  • The Slant
    March 8
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    the end of this poem is perfection.


  • Exit-Stage-Right
    March 8

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    I'm glad to see the Leaf ~n~ series hasn't ended! After reading 17 I sorta choked on 18's first word as you tricked me into reading it as the plural nouns rather than the present tense verb which you mean it! I love it--that's a fun stumble!


  • Unbreakable3
    March 8

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    I quite enjoyed that i thoguth that it was very good. amazign choice of words! Really good selectiveness!!! It flows nicley too!!


  • maa gold member
    March 8

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    "the blade’s laughter
    (keep in your mind
    summer
    was only
    joking)"

    that's like the stick of the zen-master landing on the teishi's shoulder !
    a precious reminder of phenomenal impermanence ...
    truly striking !!!


  • Pure Thought silver member
    March 7
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    This Leaf Series...

    just gets better.

    Buddy


  • Peteskid gold member
    March 7

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    so odd i just had a leaf inspiration too...although i quickly and humbly add, not nearly as eloquent as these little gems... wonderful...'skid


  • Cannonsfire
    March 7

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    I will put double yes and raise Jeff another C


  • cricketjeff gold member
    March 7
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    yes

  • Bad Bill
    March 7

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    Interesting poem, my Caledonian bard. I'm not too sure what to make of it - I suspect I'll have to read it several times to gain the full measure of its meaning.

    By the way, I'm glad you've decided to carry on posting - having read your journal, I thought you were ready to leave this site.

    All the best,
    Bill

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