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Long Overdue

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Upon a HILL I get my FILL of the Summer's MILL

STILL in VIEW I think of YOU

DO you SEE the BEAUTY

FREELY kissing the SKIES with soft gray EYES

 

 

In my SLEEP you will CREEP and I get lost DEEP

KEEP an eye on my LIGHT then with DELIGHT

TONIGHT you will SHARE in a lover's DARE

WHERE we'll start to PLAY in a heated WAY

 

 

from the START within my HEART you were a PART

RESTART the FIRE with lace ATTIRE

DESIRE will IGNITE to a new found HEIGHT

RIGHT before your EYES as lovers kiss the SUNRISE

 

 

like on that HILL by Summer's MILL you had loved me STILL

WILL the GRAY ever go AWAY?

MAY I GRIP that cherry LIP

SLIP my arms around YOU and share a love that's long OVERDUE

Author notes

Vers Beaucoup
The Vers Beaucoup, a poem for created by Curt Mongold, which is French for "many rhymes".
Each stanza consists of four lines with a rhyming word scheme of:
a-a-a-
a-b-b-
b-c-c-
c-d-d

Each rhyme can only use a MAXIMUM of three words. The fourth "a" rhyme carried over to the second
line causes enjambment and creates a strong internal rhyming structure.

An example of the form with the rhyming words capitalised for clarity:



For CRICKETJEFF, With all my love

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  • DolceVito gold member
    March 7

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    Beautiful; another excellent dedication...Well-crafted form poetry.


  • Griswold silver member
    March 7

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    Very nicely done sweetheart, another new form conquered by you. I'm sure Jeff appreciates it. I Love you...Scott


  • Swangrnv gold member
    March 7

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    Excellent

    Tory, there is simply nothing you can't do! I'm so proud of you and happy that you are CLEARLY back with the full array of skills that I discovered and loved about you from DAY ONE!!


  • cricketjeff gold member
    March 7

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    Thank-you for the dedication and for penneing a remarkable poem

    Great stuff


    Jeff


    • PassionsPromise gold member
      March 7
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      your welcome.
      it was a new form, then again, 90 % of them are.
      and you are as unique as they come.

      I tried to make you happy


  • The Drifter
    March 7
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    A very pretty poem--unique style

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