I wonder -
if I hold your hands
will I know the story of you,
or will I simply surrender to the touch
and write my own?
Author notes
Prompt: Hands
26 words
In a list
A contest entry
- Keep It Short IV by MacDad.
650 points, ended March 8, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I'm a sap for "wondering", so you have me on this one... even if it's you wondering...
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I love when a poem's title is almost as long as the writing itself. Though short, this poem is very strong, and I think my head is spinning. Events of late have me understanding this all too well! I wish I knew the answer.
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laughing..this is the truth you shared but the stories are the same if you are refering to the heart..maybe I am wrong..but you decide now..
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What a question you ask here, Lane!! I have a "hands story" to write myself too - so thank you for this beautiful one.
~ Nicolette
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The story one writes is always better than the one
our life tells...no?
Joe
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We are not the sum of perceived past events, we are defined by our actions. Memories fade and the future is not part of the past, but begins in this moment and lives in all the moments to follow. You write your own everyday.
Excellent. Well deserved silver.
Garrison
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How the HELL did you do this?! Love.
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Congrats on the well deserved silver!!!
This is so beautiful.
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beautiful
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Lovely piece, Lane, short but powerful(glad to see you back)
D
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This poem defines the phrase elegant beauty.
A single word would be perfection.
Love, Peter
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I'm not even sure what to write. Your ability to make magic with words has rendered me speechless.
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Lovely writing, with your brand of delicate sensuality, as always.
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Simple yet telling a far too often situation. I get it and I enjoyed it.
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My hands, your hands -- to know someone, lifetimes. The joy -- getting there.
Love,
Tom B.
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fabulous-good to see you back
Surrendering to soft caresses
As one’s emotions undresses
Learning story of another’s heart
Where love truly starts
Laney-you are a treasure
~ Of pure poetic pleasure ~
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No option #3
Wonderfully creative, it has your brilliant mark upon it.The mark of a true and gifted poet.It's a winner in my book, thanks for sharing your heart and spirit.
Be blessed in all you do.
Tony
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Well if this poem is a hint... your version of it will always be that much better. As always... I loved it!
Troy
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Gorgeous.
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There's something completely erotic about someone's hands in my opinion. I think in our minds we always write our own stories, don't we?
Love,
Stacy
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why is this only going as high as the ceiling? i wonder.
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You will do both, of course, but the touch triggers the question, the poetry.
Luvit.
Good luck in the contest, Lane.
Tom
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very good, even i am impressed ... excellent
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Well, my hands are a bit rough and large, but as for the rest; just ask.
Lovely, concise thought provoking write Lane.
All the best,
With much love,
Michael.
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Somehow I know that even if you surrender to the touch you will never stop writing your own story.
Poetry.
J
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I hope you can do both, for your story is fascinating.
All the best
Love,
Sue
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As delicate as a gossamer web is this-bliss to read and I feel the need to whisper in case the words fall apart....
Hilly
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completely perfect like always.
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goddawfully good
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Yes
I'm an easy read...lol
nice choice of 26.
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Now you can even do this short stuff well, I guess you will just have to hold it to find out. Perfect sweetheart. So glad to see you gracing my pages again. Best to you in the contest
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Blimey, THAT works!
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small number of words, a large dose of thoughtful depth of feelings...such a nice dilemna...PK
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nicely done, great piece
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Good job!
Thanks for entering
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simply beautiful
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i like this a lot, good write
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love this...
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C
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beautiful, I wish both could happen for you. I really love this so much
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