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Alive But Dying

My voice is truthful but my words are lying
My spirit is resisting but my mind is complying
My eyes are dry but my heart is crying
My body is alive but my soul is dying

My lips are smiling but this smile is not real
My skin will repair but my heart will not heal
My secrets are spoken but my truth is concealed
My body is safe but my mind I can’t shield

My mind is bursting but I am empty inside
My innocence is gone but myself I cannot hide
My eyes are open but my vision is blind
My hopes are fading as I struggle to fight

My voice is truthful but my words are lying
My spirit is resisting but my mind is complying
My eyes are dry but my heart is crying
My body is alive but my soul is dying

My mouth is speaking but only silent words
My ears are listening but the voices go unheard
My questions are asked but they are not answered
My memories are clear but my mind is blurred

My body is here but my mind has gone astray
My mouth wants to speak but the words I can’t say
My face may look happy but this happiness is fake
My body may be whole but I am about to break

My voice is truthful but my words are lying
My spirit is resisting but my mind is complying
My eyes are dry but my heart is crying
My body is alive but my soul is dying
My secrets are revealed but I am still in hiding
My body is now my own but in my mind he is residing
And somehow, despite all of this, I am still surviving

A contest entry

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Comments


  • secret truths89
    May 7
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    this is amazing, it's so deep & very well written.

  • ArtistTouch
    March 20

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    This is absolutely fabulous! A terrific write and stuffed full of emotion. There is a perfect balance in every sentence.
    I love the last line and it pulls the whole thing together perfectly.
    There is nothing wrong with the write and I wish you luck in the contest.

  • X ShatteredSoul X
    March 10

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    DON"T CHANGE IT!!

    This is so good, i really dont think you sould revise it! I think its soo good. And i truly LOVED the last line:
    And somehow, despite all of this, I am still surviving
    It just makes the poem so much more wonderful, i know i've said this before, but i LOVE your writeing!!!


  • xXemo-teddybearXx
    March 7

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    well i really liked this
    i can relate to the emotion and feeling tht is in this
    great write
    thankyou forentering my contest
    good luck
    xXalyXx
    his emo teddybear