The sun is out,
The birds sing,
and the day is perfect...
I turn back to the present,
with what in front of me is cold and gray...
Yes,
it seems to be a beautiful day.
But do many know how it feels?
For I have no one now,
and no one shall have me.
It is a beautiful day,
the day I spend mourning.
I shut my eyes tight,
Inhale with angst,
Exhale with defeat,
and pop open my eyes,
Yet all is still the same.
Dwelling in my head,
waits the desire to barricade about,
swirrling on my tippy toes,
screaming until I can't anymore!
and to rush up to those cold hard lips,
and lay upon them one last kiss.
The sun is still out,
and the birds still sing,
and within that wooden box you lie.
Your death is the worst,
and yet it is the best.
So do they realy know,
Any of them,
How it makes me feel?
I now shall have no one,
and no one shall have me,
yes,
such a beatiful day,
and in the end,
a beautiful mourning.
Author notes
Oh What A Beautiful Mourning and Dwelling in my head, waits the desire to...
I'm not too sure if this works... it's kind of dark, and it kinda goes with the title, so i dont know. lol
A contest entry
- The Contest Within by Inside.
1750 points, ended March 22, 18 entries
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This is a beautiful piece, of course I know what you mean by it. Particularly: "Your death is the worst,
and yet it is the best." How often that is true, particularly for me and Chris. When she went, I really didn't want her to go, but I knew it had to be because there would be no more pain, etc. I would be the one who would have to learn to deal with that. Thanks for throwing me a lifeline, two years on. -
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i take forever to check my comments on poems, and i would like to thank you for yours on oh what a beautiful mourning... im sorry to hear that you had to go through this, and im glad that i could help.
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What more can I say other than i got goosebumps as I read this.. what a deep and sad write.. yet it is not hopeless...
Well done
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thank you for you comment!
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I really like this poem as I said before. However there are so many beautifull poems in this contest and I am having trouble picking the winners. I love that you have put so much effort into this piece, but there were a few poems I liked a little better. A small critism is that I wasn't completely satisfied with the last few lines, to me they are a little corny. But that is just me and please don't take that as an insult, otherwise you write very well and I enjoyed the reading this. Sorry,
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It does work. For me anyway. I really enjoyed this, you showed me the pain, I love the use of imagery. Beautifully done. Thank-you for your entry.
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