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Awaiting Pinhead

Break.
My nail hanging on the splintered door frame
The rusty friction of my poisoned blood
Seeping through the contaminated cracks
Of the tormented nightmare I am in.

Rip.
My flesh from my hands
Clawing at the jagged walls
Cutting into my delicate veins
To slash my surroundings crimson.

Cackle.
Guttural and scratchy in my throat
Smearing broken flesh across my face
Shrieking with maddening dread
From the torture I am receiving.

Burn.
Smouldering my suffering shins
Scolding my soft skin
Blistering my blood
Singeing my soul.

Red.
The sign of suffering
The mark of murder
The trait of torture
The colour of the cruel.

But the pain is irrelevant
There is much worse to come
What kills me
Is the wait.

I scream out in agony
The itching infected insanity
Building in my nebulous mind
I scream and my body convulses

Searing temperatures fluctuate within
Animalistic howls echo amongst
And through my lunacy
I’m able to hear
Through blood soaked ears

The slow, deliberate, mechanical steps
Accompanied by the screech of rusty razor knives
The shudder of cold breath through gritted teeth
The booming bellow of a beast

My broken body sprawled and I twist
My upper half in grinding pain
My stinging eyes searching
My gasps growing

I squint at the pierced demon
The seductive cenobite
In patient, deliberate calm he growls:

Welcome, To Hell.

Screaming, shrieking,
Shattering, soul scolding
Wails will
Shudder and spin throughout the labyrinth
For eternity.

Author notes

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Hellraiser <3

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  • MJ Forgives
    December 1
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    Wow this poem creeps me out from all of the suffering. Good job! You made me feel like I was that person. I hope you do wonderful in my contest and thanks for entering. Love and Peace!
    -Jess


  • Night Terrors
    November 6

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    WOW I really liked this one a very intense poem indeed. You really boogled the imagination with the complex way you spun this poem. I am going to add this to the finalist list. Thanks for joining the group and thanks for entering


  • Deaths Prayer
    September 9
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    This was good thank you for entering my contest


  • BreakingTheSurface
    May 15
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    So amazing.


  • Night Terrors
    May 10
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    That was an a amazing poem a great style! I loved it.


    The Positives:

    i really loved the imagery and I mentioned the style that really blew me away.

    Room For Improvement:
    Nothing I can see you did wonderful



    My Favorite Part:
    The slow, deliberate, mechanical steps
    Accompanied by the screech of rusty razor knives
    The shudder of cold breath through gritted teeth
    The booming bellow of a beast

    My broken body sprawled and I twist
    My upper half in grinding pain
    My stinging eyes searching
    My gasps growing

    That is just plain amazing
    Overall:

    I give this an 9/10 you did great. I hope to see you in my future contests thanks so much for entering.

    ~*~Apathetic Poison~*~


  • JessicaMarieLewis
    May 4
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    This poem is amazing. i love it. I dont know what else to say except for good job writting it.


  • Catacomb
    March 30
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    First I checked all the AN's. Now that I read your poem in depth, I am inlove. This is brilliant.


    • English.Muffin silver member
      March 30
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      Thankyou, its an awesome thing to know that your poem can bring new meaning and thoughts from reading it more than once


  • Catacomb
    March 28

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    I love Hellraiser. Great poem. Just please put your choice of prompt and username in your AN. Thanks for entering.


  • XXheartbroken3XX
    March 10
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    wow cool...


    i liked it....


    scary...

    haha

    XoXo


  • Blue30
    March 7

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    Good luck in the contest. I really enjoyed reading this poem, it was great. I look foward to reading more of your wok.


  • WhatLiesBeneath
    March 6

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    Whoa. I could really picture that, it was a brilliantly written poem, and it was a thriller to read. I must put that movie on my must see list, you've inspired me to watch it. Haha. Amazing poem, great talent. Thanks for entering, and best of luck to you.

    Just remember to write the option you choose in the Authors Notes.

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