emotions are reactions,
that are horribly mixed,
reflexive and brain born,
they are not quiet ,
but raise a loud horn.
Brain resolves all states,
but emotional scenes,
makes it receive,
many impulses in a very short sliced go,
it is like a personal comupter,
that hangs due to many commands,
it is after all human to demand,
and your system does that and more,
you run in flood,
of feelings,
that are reflexive,
and unexplained.
By the time you are done,
emotions already had their run,
and you still wonder,
did they come from here,
or from somewhere yonder.
Author notes
did they come from here,
or from somewhere yonder.
A contest entry
- emotions by HiddenByTheDark.
700 points, ended April 2, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Great!
A well written piece. I love the way you run the emotions through the gauntlet. You have chosen your words well. Thank you for sharing
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emotions eh??
boy have they ruled my life for a long time. 'you run in flood of feelings that are reflexive and unexplained' i love that line as it is soo true.
you have captured the complexity of emotions so well.
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ohh i liked your first stanza
a bitA lot
well done on a fab write
im glad i was introduced to your fab work, cupcake!
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I love this. I love the way you liken the brain to a computer. Lines 9-11. Also loved how you questioned Emotion at the end. So good.
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good concept
I liked the concept of your poem. In that you're still confused as to where the heck these feelings came from; and as humans we try so hard to make sense of all things. But really, we can't always comprehend them.
I think the flow could be a little better. It was a little choppy. And parts like this:
"many impulses in a very short sliced go,
it is like a personal comupter,
that hangs due to many commands,"
were a little hard to understand.
but seriously, the concept is great. Good luck on your contest.
liZ
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