Use Me....Abuse Me....Break Me,
please do.
You will think that I know,
but I will pretend not to,
I love the pain,
that you give.
Don't think this is new,
the pain is familiar,
I have done to that,
many times before,
and you will not make a new gore.
My spirit is in shreds,
my body bears the marks,
as yet it asks for more,
nay it harks.
When you are done and tired,
the life will rebound and rewind,
you would live the pain,
that you gave me with cane,
you releived me after a while,
but you will be in it,
for an unending mile.
Author notes
you releived me after a while,
but you will be in it,
for an unending mile.
A contest entry
- Break What Has Already Been Destroyed. by WhatLiesBeneath.
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Your emotions ring out in every line. I am sorry this has happened to you and I thank-you for expressing how eventually you get used to the pain inflicted because people don't understand that that is why some people self inflict pain. To feel the normalcy in which we became accustomed. Instead they see it as a way to try to gain attention.
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"My spirit is in shreds,
my body bears the marks,
as yet it asks for more,
nay it harks." -Nice bit there. I liked that.
As far as the rest of it, while it's good content, I can see some areas that could be helped or improved, but only if you want it. I will gladly help and make suggestions, but privately, if you are truly willing. 
~Hettie -
i love the first stanza!
this is amazing.
i really liked it! -
I liked it. It's as if you're asking for the abuse, you need it to feel okay. I really liked that about the moment. Just remember to put the option you choose in the Authors Notes and you're all sweet. Thanks for entering, and good luck.
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