and the magpie caws
he offers trinkets of silver stars and something
from a new sky
she: purrs in a shadow of submission
his voice travels down wires and across plasma
her head turns
to the window she pains
but it's gone
the scratch, the scrape
again, she sighs
- hears him; closer
wings beating
wings apart
and then; a knock at the door
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I love the anticipation that is suggested in this one..
the quiet inside the window and waiting..
the pawing at the window
you know i love that, told you already
such a good image
great personification to how we really do things, you know?
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this is so good gill
i almost thing wings beating
wings apart might be a more effective ending.. but
either way
wonderful poetry
love the title and follow-up line
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there is a very "open door" for thoughts of our own in the interpretation of this. I like that most about this poem. the visions of the wings as they come and go - beating (as she might feel a beating within as well) is simply wonderful too. I think that's my favorite vivid image in all of this - it captures ones attention and brings my thought to that image as clear as can be.
so much to love about this kind of poetry.
Kim
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thanks Kim, as always your words are so touching
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...Jane has a new bunny rabbit: white with blue eyes. I suggested she call it "Sinatra". She won't hear of it!
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she could call it nancy if it was a girl
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She says they arn't sure if it's a "Nancy" or a "Frank".
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lovely. windows and plasma: portals. wings and hearts: things that beat. knock knock. -phish
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lubblyjubblyfish
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'from a new sky' - always good!
... and ahhh' the 'knock at the door' ... bliss!
Love it!
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That last line suggests more...,so I wait with bated breath for the more C
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yes do
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this is beautiful gilly... almost a far-away "look" to this one.
~ Nicolette
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thankyou soul sistah
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- hears him; closer
wings beating
wings apart
and then; a knock at the door
^^^^ brilliant imagery
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