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The Bluest Blue

The bluest blue
Eases my mind
Bringing peaceful
Feelings deep inside

The bluest blue
Touches my spirit
Gently, so profound
I can almost hear it

The bluest blue
Winter's deep freeze sky
Like shimmering oceans,
And your warm loving eyes

The bluest blue
Draws me in
Engulfing me fully
Until, I am the bluest blue
Again

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  • usually-untitled
    June 30

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    the short lines feel so contemplative- it's almost like following this train of thought about the blue eyes through an entire day, seeing how it changes with the writer's mood.
    i like the contrasts between it being comforting and cold.


  • lechap
    March 6

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    Interesting write. The repetition builds and depends your poem. I like the dichotomy you present between comfort and deppression/the cold. Good rhtyhm too


  • DeadlyPoetic88
    March 6

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    I liked this.
    Very well constructed and emotional write. Great job. keep it up poet!!!!

    -deadly


  • Wake Up Dead
    March 6
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    Very effective piece

    A very clever use of words. For a moment I thought the room had gone blue!