sandblast these prickly walls
make them smooth enough to feel
annihilate this insulation
and get down to where I'm real
exfoliate the jagged edges
'til you penetrate my inner core
chisel at the stony surfaces
I don't want them anymore
Author notes
PIF, 10 Lines or less.
Word Prompt: Fabric
A contest entry
- PIF/Prompt by AliceinPoetryLand.
1100 points, ended March 6, 2009, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Beautiful metaphoric penning! This really screams of someone beckoning the right person to come along and tear down the walls, get beneath the surface and see who they truly are. Love the penning, beautiful work
~Tia
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I love the metaphors!
and the use of exfoliate!
Well done
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Excellent rhyme and rhythm here! Enhances the emotion that flows through this. Nicely done and congrats on the trophy! well deserved!
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Wonderful! There is such amazing metaphor throughout this. It sounds to me just like a whole new outlook on life has been created.
Thank you so much for your entry.
Gaylene
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Oh my, so glad I dropped in to read this write...Such imagery for the prompt! Thought provoking feelings..
write!
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