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waiting (at the market)





smiling boy in cart waves,
but lil' girl shows no notice -
elsewhere, a child cries












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  • Luciferschild
    March 24

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    i love the apathy and the sadness of this poem, especially how two events are unrelated but somehow resonate. great job!!

  • Suzanne Dia
    March 8

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    I've missed a few
    love these snapshots
    the light and dark
    how they mix and keep the balance

    nicely executed to my mind.


    • motel silver member
      March 8
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      thanks
      ... been caught up in a haiku binge. I think I'm over it ... well, maybe just one more.


  • Josephine Fredericks
    March 8

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    mysterious

    I love the way that you describe the atmosphere, it sounds sureal yet ordinary but in a gret way, its short and clever,this is a great poem, thankyou for your comment by the way on my poem, once again I think this poem is not only great but a mysterious and amazing way of describing such a simple event as waiting
    from jo